Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Society benefits more from works of great artists than from politic leaders.
Some people may say that artists contributes society more than politic leaders as improving the way how people think or understanding new perspectives of life. However, I personally disagree with the statement that society benefits more from works of great artists than from politic leaders. I feel this way for a couple of reasons which I will wxplore in the following essay.
To begin with, I live in a community that politic leaders think their society, they make desicions for the sake of the society. I think our leaders affect all people in the country. For example; we had an economic crisis in 2001, in Turkey. All the politic leaders took action to overcome the economic issues, and they appeared on tv to tell the citizens that there was nothing to be afraid of, and the crisis would be over soon. It actually happened that way, lots of people counted on them, and in the end, trust to the government increased. That is not an issue that artists or other people can do. Beyond politic leaders, no one can save the country from a bad going. So, this illustrates how society benefits from politic leaders acts.
Furthermore, politic leaders make rules that benefit to the citizens in various fields, such as; education, healt, transportation and so on. These certain works benefit the society more than the artists` artifical works. I think, today what we need is more enhancement and development in these basic areas. If our country develops in these fields, after that we can expect benefit from other types of works. If there is no good education and healt service in a country how can people expect benefit from other things.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that politic leaders significantly are the ones who most contribute and serve to the citizens in a country. Other people than politic leaders can not do realistic contributions to society as I gave reasons above.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, for example, i feel, i think, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1578.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 322.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90062111801 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61860731657 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521739130435 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 489.6 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.0688381991 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.6666666667 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8888888889 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.367150973405 0.236089414692 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121747703995 0.076458572812 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.165085121343 0.0737576698707 224% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239184773078 0.150856017488 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.140807926195 0.0645574589148 218% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Try to use less pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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