Do you agree or disagree with the following statement For students who are planning to work in business learning about psycology is more important than learning about technology Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For students who are planning to work in business, learning about psycology is more important than learning about technology. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

In the modern 21st century soft skills, such as uderstanding other people's desires, are much more crucial than hard ones, such as knowing how certain device works. Personally, I believe that nowadays learning process should be organized around psycology discipline, especially for students who plan to link their careers with business. I feel this way for several reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.

To begin with, the more you understand people in your team the better results you can achieve. And to do so you have to comprehend what motivates people. And only the psycology classes or courses could provide this information to you. My experience is a compelling illustration of this. Two years ago I, as a manager in major Russian oil and gas company, was assigned with complex project that had to be done in a short period. It was my first experience of managing more than twenty team members. Unfortunatelly, I made mistake and focused on technical part of the project, as I knew how to deal with it, rather than led the team. It was not a surprize for me that I did not manage to meet the deadline. My supervisor assesed my job and provided me with clear feedback that I had to boost my soft skills. To do so I participated in special program that was about psycolocical issues of managing teams and people. As a result, my next project was finished within the time, moreover, I was nomitated for the best project manager award. I definitely think that if I had psycology classes when I was at university, I would have not made such mistakes.

Secondly, in contrast with technology aspects of the things that change every 5-10 years, the pcycological ones stay constant for centures. That is why students should dedicate time to the latters, and this knowledge could be used for whole life. I remember that at university I spent two semesters to go deeper for subject of using the laser technology to store and write data to CD-disks. Does any one in 2020 use such devices? Obviuosly no. On the other hand, I still use tips provided by psycology professor about how to work with stress.

In conclusion, I strongly believe that psycology should be the main focus for students who wants to get good results in business. This is because it will allow them to make the most of the employees, and, moreover, these knowledge will not be obsolete.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 373, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the laser technology to store and write data to CD-disks. Does any one in 2020 u...
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Line 7, column 64, Rule ID: MAIN_FOCUS[1]
Message: Use simply 'focus'.
Suggestion: focus
...ly believe that psycology should be the main focus for students who wants to get good resu...
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Line 7, column 216, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this knowledge' or 'these knowledges'?
Suggestion: this knowledge; these knowledges
...e most of the employees, and, moreover, these knowledge will not be obsolete.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1962.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 413.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75060532688 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68119548353 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 613.8 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.1129429504 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.1818181818 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7727272727 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.36363636364 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23382455751 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0593926731115 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0487812543136 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130920845306 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0446214160337 0.0645574589148 69% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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