Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this progressive and sophisticated world where we live, people love to be successful in the job either by relation or by being expertise on that area. With in this mind, some people over wight the relationship and over look the science and experiment, because they believe you just need some sort of tasks in a certain job and you can access it by spending some month in the work. However, I totally disagree with their view and believing that studying hard in school in more important than relation. The reasons to substantiated my viewpoint are elaborated upon hereunder.
The chief reasons why I generally think so is the self confidence. If you work in a place where you don't understand anything, I will frustrate, destroyed your self confidence. Take my class mate for example. Even though he didn't have any work experiment and knowledge, he was working in a very huge construction because his father is one of the well know in my city. He actually knew that he wasn't suitable for this option, he always have stress for his lack of experiment and knowledge. Besides, since he doesn't himself to obtain this position, it was not important for him to let it go. Finally, after some months, he gives up. As you can see, relation seems to barking always wrong trees if you don't know what the next you have to do.
Second, no one can hurt your position. One of the major point of the success in work is it's stability. You never be able to have your work position for a long term because if the relation get in trouble you also will lost you job and position which in and of itself cause stress and the frustration in your life. For instance, my father didn't have much relation with. However, he was studying hard during his college years. He always says that at first it was very hard for me to find a job, but I started to work in a construction agency with very low salary. He says "after some years, the agency heads were recognize the efficiency my solution to the problem and I got promotion in my position." On the other hand one of my father friends work in better company with high wage, but he was eke out from their because his lack of knowledge and ability. In the final analysis, in the first economical drop, you will the likely the first one who will lose the job. My father experiment thought me that even it looks harder for us, but if we reach to any thing by other continuous working, we hardly we lose it.
In conclusion, taking aforementioned reasons and examples into account, I believe that for being successful in your future work, science which come from the hard-working college years will over weighted all the other aspects including relation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, finally, first, however, if, look, second, so, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, sort of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 75.0 43.0788530466 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 8.0752688172 310% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2213.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 481.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60083160083 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57437212246 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507276507277 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 688.5 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.9132865892 48.9658058833 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.590909091 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8636363636 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.86363636364 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238261982288 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0717443612877 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0561233045845 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154875235432 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0429781769253 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.21 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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