Do you agree or disagree with the following statement For success in a future job the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Success is the most desire object in anyone life especially in job. There are many factors determine the success such as, knowledge, communication skill, patience, honesty and hard-working mentality. The future position in work is depends on how someone relate with people more than only limited in books cover- some would agree with this claim others would not. In my view, it is study that will define the offing success in the job. I think in that way because of the two following important reason.

The main reason is that, we know knowledge is power. The more you learnt, the more you competent. The present age is full of competition especially in the job field as the job descriptions and responsibilities are enormous. So, without studying hard those calibers are not obtainable. For example, a few days I went a pharmaceutical companies websites and I found they have needed the skilled person who have vast knowledge in different instrument, assay, result interpretation etc. After that, I curb my desire to apply on that company and took the decision to study hard. This experience taught me that, without knowing enough none can get their desired job.

Another reason is that, learning to make someone more discreet in decision making that enables to become a good leader. Leadership is important for any organization especially during decision making. On the basis of this concept, there are many classes is drawn in an organization, some one officer and other would be the CEO of the same company. This difference in rank depends on the knowledge, skills and how discreet the person during decision taking. To be more specific, a few years ago I had visited a multinational company as a part of my intern. On that time, I have noticing the professionalism of that organization. Later, I understood the real deal when one executive is wavering to take decision about a technical problem. Surprisingly, the CEO of that company resolved the issue within minutes. As you can see that, those skills possessed by the CEO came suddenly but he acquired that skill by his considerable discretion.

To wrap up, although it is normal to think that, someone would proclaim the ability to relate with people is more important than lucubrating hard but in long run it will not convincing to glean more good for that person. Studying not only, prepared us better for the job but also enable us to reach the top tier of the company. So, we should give enough importance on learning to get the most good for our career.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 99, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ore you learnt, the more you competent. The present age is full of competition espe...
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Line 7, column 175, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'convince'
Suggestion: convince
...rating hard but in long run it will not convincing to glean more good for that person. Stu...
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Line 7, column 186, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'gleaning'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'convince' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: gleaning
... but in long run it will not convincing to glean more good for that person. Studying not...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, for example, i think, such as, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2099.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89277389277 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79093119767 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540792540793 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 666.0 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.2957368956 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.4583333333 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.875 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.5 5.45110844103 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248731444726 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.062493106643 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0572207449278 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162861266097 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0783251196383 0.0645574589148 121% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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