Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone online games and social networking Web site Use specific reasons and examples to | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Education is the backbone of the nation as it is ensure the society, country and world future. The advancement of technology is widespread in our life from the time we wake up to the time we go to the bed. The technology is made an arduous task for parents to educate their offspring is the given statement- with this someone would agree, others would not. In my opinion, the invention and widespread availability of technology poses a greater risk for the path of learning. I think in this way for the following two important reason.

The main reason is that technology down our students concentration towards their study. As most of the time they are busy by doing social networking, they are possessed by an illusion and forget what actually they should do? For example, a few years ago when I was studying in a school, we had not cell phone access and the social media using were utterly impossible for me! On that time, I was only concentrated on my study and in return I am now a successful man. The picture of todays students is quite opposite because they tends to believe us they are doing a discreet job by doing online browsing but the picture become crystal when their school performance is presented. As you can see that, online activities poses a downturn effects on students academic performance by reducing their attention.

Another reason is that the excessive use of technologies makes vulnerable to the students physical and mental health. When, a student is busy doing online games, by talking on cell phones but he actually not time to play outside, hanging with his friends and visiting to his relative houses. For this reason, they are suffering psychological trauma and poor growth of their body. To be more specific, before the invention of internet, we saw many students were playing outdoor plays such as cricket, badminton, football but after it has come the picture was changed dramatically. These effects causes to starts psychological counseling’s culture. But, for our own childhood, it was unimaginable that a student needs such kind of counselling to cut off from this illusory world. This experience taught me that the availability of internet and technological revolution made us isolated that hinder our children mental and physical growth.

In conclusion, it is possible to flaunt the benefits of technology for improving education especially for children but in reality the control and proper use is quite hard. The boon of technology became bane that not only reduce the attention but also traumatized students. So, we should not let our children to use technology in an unrestrained manner.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 50, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'ensured'.
Suggestion: ensured
... is the backbone of the nation as it is ensure the society, country and world future. ...
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Line 3, column 529, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'tend'
Suggestion: tend
...students is quite opposite because they tends to believe us they are doing a discreet...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 327, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an unrestrained manner" with adverb for "unrestrained"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... not let our children to use technology in an unrestrained manner.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, so, for example, i think, in conclusion, kind of, such as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2203.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 442.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98416289593 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83801052873 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542986425339 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 693.9 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.1190970406 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.15 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208219997588 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0568867721109 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0421883265721 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120185023675 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0469538470159 0.0645574589148 73% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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