Some young adults wants independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better?
Freedom is the most desired and also expected term in this world. Many kinds of independence are available such as, relieve from autocratic government, religious freedom and desire to live an autonomous life. Some adults are wants to seek from their parents and others are not seek to separate their families- someone would agree the earlier adults, other would agree with the latter group of adults. In my view, separation from family is rather positive effects on younger because of the following two important reason.
The main reason is that it helps them to better understand the ironic reality. Reality is full of uncertain where no one care anyone. But, staying under family parasols, this grim truth is often unnoticed. To be more specific, most of my student life I had passed with my family. On that time, I did not understand and feel the lack of empathy and nature of human. When, I left my home for graduate studies, I came to know the human nature where no one care other. In 2015, when, I was in my hostel, one day I was suffering a high grade fever and no one around me to take care. Because my friends were busy with their own work. As you can see that, the blessings of family is understandable when someone came to experience the harsh reality.
Another reason is that detachment from family also enables us to understand their sacrifice. Often, we think why our family not give us enough money, suffice us every needs and why they interfere our freedom. For instance, after completing my graduation I have joined a multinational company as an executive officer. My salary was not that high to support my own family and in the mean time I also became father of a son. One day, my son was missing from our living room. And I was crestfallen to think about him and his security. Then I began to understand, why my family was not give much money what I want and why they did not let me alone. This experience taught me that, only parents know how much they love their children and think about their safety.
In sum, as you can see that, separation from family helps to realize the reality and also awake us to understand their importance in our life. So, it should be a good choice separated from family for larger benefits.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 579, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ever and no one around me to take care. Because my friends were busy with their own wor...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then, for instance, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1850.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 402.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60199004975 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43762310171 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539800995025 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 602.1 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.7399708546 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.4347826087 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4782608696 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.52173913043 5.45110844103 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221189393566 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0594847661609 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.055227106707 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142772018163 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0495521603495 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.1 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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