Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use spesific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today’s world, anyone all over the globe needs a job to save money which can spend on important matters. In this vein, when it comes to connecting with others, some prefer to do so, while the others prefer to study hard in school. Personally, I agree with the idea that we must increase our ability to connect perfectly to people in order to have a successful job in the future. I feel this way for some reasons, which I will explore them on the following essay.
To begin with, we can gain some knowledge from others when we make them a good connection. We can make friends if we connect with people properly. As a result, they speak about nascent technologies and methodologies with us as a friend. Thus, they, in the meantime, share their knowledge about different subjects with us. For instance, several years ago, I was hired as a software architect in a company. After I had made some friends in the company, they, as my friends, shared some knowledge that relates to my profession with me. Consequently, I increased my knowledge that I could not gain in school. Hence, if we connect with other people, we can increase our knowledge with their assistance.
Secondly, it goes without saying that sympathetic friends help us find a solution for problematic issues in life. In daily life, especially in the work environment, we encounter different issues and problems. The friends will be familiar with our personalities. Thus, they can consult us and give some advice that can solve our problems. For example, two years ago, I worked in a company. After I had faced a problem in my personal life, one of my friends knew that I had some problems. He helped me solve the problem because he was familiar with my disposition. Hence, if we relate well to people, they can help us in case of facing different problems, whether in personal life or the work environment.
To sum up, taking the reasons and examples above consideration, I think that relating well to people is more important than studying hard in school to having a successful feature job. It stands on reasons that not only can people increase our knowledge, but also they can help us find a solution for problems that we will face in our personal life and our work environment.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, if, second, secondly, so, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, i feel, i think, as a result, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1861.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71139240506 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71041479143 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.486075949367 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 574.2 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.1238712715 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.5909090909 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9545454545 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.18181818182 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184827150688 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0591575593171 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0769407820485 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143491207872 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.085831542246 0.0645574589148 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.74 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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