Do you agree or disagree with the following statement For success in a future job the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

In the modern era, success in job play a significant role in all societies. Some people believe that social and communicative abilities are more important than studying hard in school, while others might take an opposite view. I personally believe that studying hard can pave the way for success in future job. I have two reasons clarifying my belief, which I aim to explore in the following essay.
First of all, people who study hard can gain knowledge and expertise, which leads to finding a variety of job opportunities. In fact, this expertise will pave the way for their success in future jobs. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. A couple of years ago, my brother, who was a municipal employee, decided to continue his education at university. Because he knew that the municipal will select the mayor among those who have a higher education degree. Therefore, he studied hard and gained expertise in municipal matters. This expertise led to him being selected as the mayor. This example showed that studying hard led to success in future jobs.
The next reason is that people who study hard will be equipped with a high level of creativity, which is the backbone of success. In fact, these people will be exposed to different problems in school, and solving these problems will lead to a creative mind being triggered. For instance, several years ago, I studied at Tarbiat Modares University in Tehran. My professor gave me different problems and asked me to find a creative way to answer them. After I graduated, because of the creativity that I gained from the university, I was selected as a successful stock marketer.
In conclusion, according to the reasons and examples mentioned above, I strongly believe that studying hard is more important than the ability to relate well to people. This is because people who study hard can gain knowledge related to their future jobs and can improve their creativity in school.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 371, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...o continue his education at university. Because he knew that the municipal will select ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1625.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 329.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93920972644 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68827071865 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501519756839 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.6017690664 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.5263157895 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3157894737 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.94736842105 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311341285048 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.097986826984 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.085194190329 0.0737576698707 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217997979482 0.150856017488 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.088879400166 0.0645574589148 138% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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