Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teenager should be encouraged to have jobs while they are still in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is no shortage of opinion on people acquiring to be independent in their life. They want to earn sum either for own pleasure or to assist family financially. In the given scenario, it is perceived that whether children should be motivated to engage in job prior to their graduation or not is a trigger heated topic. Meanwhile, I am of the opinion that teen age is the golden period of time where they should be encouraged to enjoy their life and be focused on study rather than obtaining unnecessary tension. I feel this way for several reasons which I will explore in the subsequent paragraphs.
To commence with, to involve in certain job require a lot of courage in them as once we get involved then we have no choice than to accept and adapt in a situation that our workplace offer. To be more precise, teenagers are amateur and they do not have good knowledge about outside world so they might become anxious when they come to face situation like scold for not accomplishing task within given time, handling manager’s pressure and so on. Drawing from my own experience, my sister used to do job when she was in 10th grade. At first, she was happy and content as she was being self dependent however as time passes she was given a more responsibility which she could not managed and eventually she quit the job. Therefore, we have to step forward according to our capability.
Similarly, education is a key component in order to flourish our career. In addition, if we are unable to allocate enough time to our study then we will surely fail to achieve our desired goal. As a matter of fact, if we invest our time in doing some sort of task then we would not be able to concentrate in our study which subsequently lead towards our failure. I myself is a compelling evidence of this. During my school time, seeing my sister going to office, I forcefully engage in small job. I was elated at the beginning yet as the time passes this debilitate my study. I used to be in top 5 prior to my job, after that my position plummeted to 2oth. Needless to say, this made me realize that I should be more focused to my study so that I can obtain my desired career in future. Hence, teenage is the time to concentrate on study rather than thinking to make money. If they can excel in their study now then they will have better career in future for sure.
All things considered, every parents should motivate their children to study wholeheartedly. This way, they can bloom their career otherwise they will be the biggest loser.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: teenage
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Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'manage'
Suggestion: manage
...more responsibility which she could not managed and eventually she quit the job. Theref...
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
... so that I can obtain my desired career in future. Hence, teenage is the time to concentr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, similarly, so, then, therefore, while, i feel, in addition, sort of, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2076.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 457.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54266958425 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57319995621 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525164113786 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 675.0 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.1027578621 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.3636363636 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7727272727 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22727272727 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171740489143 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0502886792452 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0360833741745 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109743551961 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0228935150708 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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