Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Telephone has greater influence on people’s lives than television has.
What is the most effective communication invention throughout history? Through different times, there have been numerous devices to help people communicate. Two of the most important of these devices are telephone and television. Many people think that television has had a greater influence on people’s lives rather than telephone while others may have another idea. In my opinion, television has had a greater effect on people’s lives. This is because it helps to spread culture, it is one of the best entertainment tools, and it has a huge commercial use.
First, television has helped to spread culture across society. Before the invention of television, people were not able to see different cultures because they did not leave their homes much. The only way to get news about other parts of the world and their cultures was through newspapers or telegraph. Television introduced people with vision so that they could “see” what people in other parts of the world would do under different circumstances. In other words, they became familiar with various cultures all around the world and thus, they could accept it more willingly. For example, in the US, people in central parts could not go to big cities such as Washington and so, they were not familiar with the way people dressed or behaved in these places. However, after the invention of television, they could observe other cultures and accept them after becoming familiar with them. This helped spread various cultures across the US.
Second, television is a great means to entertain people. It has movies, cartoons, and documentaries that could be appropriate for almost all ages. Prior to the invention of television, people did not have much to do after they got home from work or school. Yet again, television introduced media that could gather the members of a family together to watch a specific program. In other words, by the function of entertainment, television helped families spend more time with each other. For instance, little kids could watch cartoons on television so that their parents could do their work at home with more freedom. Also, teenagers could watch series and movies and enjoy their free time. Besides, their parents could watch the news and get the latest information about their society.
Finally, since television is able to alter the behaviors of individuals, not only could it suggest a means to entertain people but also it could cast an immense influence on the commercial function side of the phenomena.
television has immense commercial use because it can change people’s habits through advertisements. Great companies and industries are aware of the crucial role of television on the viewers. So, they make good use of this and advertise their product on the television so frequently that the viewer, even not knowingly, is absorbed to the product and this, is more probable to buy it. Also, television could develop certain habits among individuals in society or prevent them from doing harmful activities. For example, women in the 1950’s were not willing to buy washing machines because they thought that the dishes would not be clean. However, by advertising a pretty young woman on the television who is washing her dishes in a washing machine clean and smooth, people were attracted to the product and bought it.
In the end, I think television has a major influence on people’s daily lives compared to the telephone. This is due to several reasons including but not limited to easier culture diversification, bring about the most contemporary means of fun, and having financial benefits due to advertisements. Nobody could deny the importance of the telephone in society. However, from a daily life point of view, television has had a much larger effect on individuals’ lives. This effect continues to be but in different forms since the advent of the Internet with social media such as Netflix, Amazon, and DisneyPlus. You could hardly find anybody who would not use televisions in some way these days since our lives are intertwined with this invention.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Television
...ercial function side of the phenomena. television has immense commercial use because it c...
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Line 8, column 559, Rule ID: BUY_VBG[1]
Message: Did you mean 'by'?
Suggestion: by
...women in the 1950’s were not willing to buy washing machines because they thought t...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, however, if, may, second, so, thus, while, for example, for instance, i think, such as, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 97.0 52.1666666667 186% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3431.0 1977.66487455 173% => OK
No of words: 667.0 407.700716846 164% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14392803598 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.08196252842 4.48103885553 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74867838757 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 301.0 212.727598566 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.451274362819 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1051.2 618.680645161 170% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 35.0 20.6003584229 170% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.1272390991 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0285714286 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0571428571 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.37142857143 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8709677419 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23552512025 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0630770010587 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0680033281724 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1323572796 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0520103082833 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 86.8835125448 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Television
...ercial function side of the phenomena. television has immense commercial use because it c...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 559, Rule ID: BUY_VBG[1]
Message: Did you mean 'by'?
Suggestion: by
...women in the 1950’s were not willing to buy washing machines because they thought t...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, however, if, may, second, so, thus, while, for example, for instance, i think, such as, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 97.0 52.1666666667 186% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3431.0 1977.66487455 173% => OK
No of words: 667.0 407.700716846 164% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14392803598 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.08196252842 4.48103885553 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74867838757 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 301.0 212.727598566 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.451274362819 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1051.2 618.680645161 170% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 35.0 20.6003584229 170% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.1272390991 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0285714286 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0571428571 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.37142857143 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8709677419 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23552512025 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0630770010587 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0680033281724 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1323572796 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0520103082833 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 86.8835125448 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.