A controversy is often raised about television advertisement influence on our children. Some groups of people hold the view that the television advertisement has some advantages to make children happy. However, others have an opposing view and feel that television advertisement has several disadvantages and is harmful to the children. In my vantage point, I concur with later view and firmly believe that such advertisement would cause children to develop bad habits.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that Television advertisement would cause parents to pay more for merchandise. Some parents may argue that children feel happy to buy a branded toy being advertised. However, parents often complain of paying more for this branded toy when compared to all other toys in the store. Children's ignorance make them easily being deceived by the information presented. A vivid example which illustrate my point is the price I had to pay for a toy to my kid that was advertised on the TV. I had to pay double the price for the same toy compared to all other toys in the store.
The second point which deserves some thought is that advertisements encourages children to eat unhealthy food. Although children feel happy to watch a MacDonald advertisement and go eat in the restaurant, they are unaware of the bad effect of junk food on their health. Junk food is known to cause obesity, and vitamins deficiencies because it is all made of frozen food. Thus, by allowing children to watch these advertisements, we are encouraging them to eat unhealthy.
Although the aforementioned reason are the first to cross my mind at a glance, they are by no means the only reasons available. In fact, there is another subtle point. The noteworthy, refreshingly, intelligible study that was published in the pediatric Journal which showed that television advertisements creates a gap between parents and their children. This study was conducted on 120 children from different areas to prevent any bias.
To wrap up, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons. one soon realizes that television advertisements directed towards children does not only encourages bad eating habits, but can also harm the relationship between the parents and their children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, thus, as to, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1894.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2032967033 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07124181154 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516483516484 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 584.1 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.2817314512 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.7 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.4 5.45110844103 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174911200782 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0589553422744 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0504175494217 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106641415867 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0424839238903 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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