Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this century, the world become so competetive, and as a result, businessowners use advertisement policy to attract consumers. On of these policies is absorbing children attention. personally, I believe that television advertising toward young children should be forbidden. I feel this way for two main reasons, wich i will explore in the following essay.
First of all, children havn't been mature enough yet, to distinguish between right and wrong ,and, also, they influence by colorful scenes and animations; hence, they probably choose improper product. My own experience is a compelling example of this. My sibling is five years old, and she is affected by advertisements on TV very much. Indeed, most of the time she cries and conflict with us to gain what she watches on commercials such as colorful candies, expensive toys and etc.
Secondly, so much tension and stress is brought to family by children reactions and insistence toward their demands, and can cause so many struggle between family members. For instance, i have worked for a company for many years, and one of my collegues was a father of 5 children who couldn't afford his family basic needs. In this case, his children watched TV and asked him to buy diversity of toys, he was under a lot of pressure due to he coudn't satisfy their desires; therefore, they had many arguments at home.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that advertisement agency shouldn't make advertises devoting to children. This is because youger children are not capable of determining appropriate from inappropriate, and because it causes a lot of troubles in families.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 184, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Personally
...licies is absorbing children attention. personally, I believe that television advertising ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 320, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...eel this way for two main reasons, wich i will explore in the following essay. ...
^
Line 3, column 92, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
..., to distinguish between right and wrong ,and, also, they influence by colorful sc...
^^
Line 3, column 474, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...uch as colorful candies, expensive toys and etc. Secondly, so much tension and stres...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 482, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...olorful candies, expensive toys and etc. Secondly, so much tension and stress is ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 135, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun struggle seems to be countable; consider using: 'many struggles'.
Suggestion: many struggles
... toward their demands, and can cause so many struggle between family members. For instance, ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 156, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
..., and can cause so many struggle between family members. For instance, i have wor...
^^
Line 5, column 287, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...ollegues was a father of 5 children who couldnt afford his family basic needs. In this ...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 61, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
...ongly believe that advertisement agency shouldnt make advertises devoting to children. T...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1359.0 1977.66487455 69% => OK
No of words: 265.0 407.700716846 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12830188679 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9525643379 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.667924528302 0.524837075471 127% => OK
syllable_count: 415.8 618.680645161 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.693672437 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.538461538 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3846153846 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.53846153846 5.45110844103 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 11.8709677419 17% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159848454847 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0617038295619 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0698656954429 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0958689346125 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0554721459218 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.