Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television
has destroyed communication among friends and family. Use
specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Television undoubtedly has had a huge impact on society. Personally, I think that television has caused a decrease in interaction between people. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To start with, these days a lot of people prefer to spend their spare time in front of a TV instead of going out and enjoying the company of their friends. The variety of channels offer us a myriad of documentaries, movies, and entertaining programs to watch. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. I have a full-time job and family with two children to take care of. Not only that, but I constantly practice English in order to obtain a pharmaceutical license in the United States and work in my favorite field. In this way, I always tired and when I have some free time I just want to lay down on a couch in front of a TV and relax. Moreover, I have a cable, and so there is always plenty of fascinating films to watch. As a result, I do not socialize with my friends as often as I did before and I feel that our connection has weakened. This example illustrates how television can negatively affect relationships.
Secondly, numerous political programs on television have caused misunderstandings and conflicts among citizens. Many reporters do not search for information for their reportages properly and therefore they provide misleading facts about others which regular people can believe in. For instance, when a few years ago my country faced a presidential election, certain channels praised a particular candidate because he paid them the for their support. They told that the applicant founded a charity organization and had financially helped disabled children. My mother believed in this information and wanted to vote for him. However, I knew that he was corrupted and I tried to explain he the truth. We argued a lot and even did not talk to each other for a while. Finally, police found out that his charity organization was just a way to avoid paying taxes and so he was dismissed. Although sometimes television provides topics that relatives can listen to and discuss, very often the information can divide them.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that modern television has threatened communication between family members and friends. This is because watching TV is sometimes more relaxing that socializing with friends, and because a lot of lie on TV leads to conflicts between relatives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, as a result, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2046.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 415.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93012048193 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9777088325 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559036144578 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 647.1 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.0894616853 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.9565217391 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0434782609 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.30434782609 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0694487654406 0.236089414692 29% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0191007165568 0.076458572812 25% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.025330866099 0.0737576698707 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0396857315055 0.150856017488 26% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0194723542015 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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