Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
People have been arguing a lot regarding whether it is more important to be able to get along with others or to be an excellent student. Personally, I think that being capable of building positive relationships is more beneficial. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, having great relationships with co-workers can guarantee a long employment. These days, most of the businesses based on teamwork and employers prefer to keep those workers, who are loved by team members since pleasant environment at a workplace helps to achieve great outcomes. My mothers` experience in a compelling example of this. My mother is an aging woman and has a lot of health`s issues. Because of that, sometimes, when she feels weak, she calls off. On the other hand, she has very friendly and kind personality and always tries to help those who are around her. For these traits of her character, her crew adores her. Therefore, even if sometimes she has to stay at home or visit a doctor and miss the work, her colleagues do not complain but support her. As a result, she has been working in the same company for almost twenty-five years on a row.
Secondly, if new employees are social and easy to relate with, they can learn quickly about their new jobs and be noticed by their supervisors. Very often, young professionals who were advanced students in college face challenges when they start their professional journey because the reality of work environment can be different from what they read in books. In this way, the best source of knowledge for them is their seasoned colleagues. For instance, when I just started working as a pharmacist, I found out that I did not know much about how to process claims to insurance companies or how to deal with angry customers. Fortunately, I was able to make friends with my pharmacy`s staff quickly and from them, I learned how to resolve the problems. Conversely, if I had not been open to communication with my colleagues and had not asked them a myriad of questions, they would not have taught me important for my job tips.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that in order to excel it is more advantageous for people to be able to relate well with others than study hard in school. This is because it can provide them with an employment for many years, and grow professionally.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, first, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, as to, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1976.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7729468599 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85683753282 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586956521739 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.4235173727 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.8 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.75 5.45110844103 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161061497759 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0461932889707 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0598302018911 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117524691364 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0733747580682 0.0645574589148 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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