Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Life has changed dramatically in the past few decades. This change affected priorities of the young generation. Personally, I think that these days youth devote less time to their communities than in the past. There are a few reasons why I hold this opinion.
First of all, modern students are incredibly busy gaining an education. Nowadays, in order to succeed in life, people have to have a profession, which can help them to support their families and feel confident. For this reason, young people attend college or university. An educational process is an arduous one, and those who study a lot simply do not have free time to spend it on helping their communities. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was a student in a pharmacy school, I was overwhelmed with the amount of different kind of assignments and presentations I had to fulfill. Sometimes, I spend nights preparing for my classes and trying to comprehend difficult topics. In this way, I did not have a chance to participate actively in the life of my hometown even if I wanted to. I knew, if I had stopped studying, my grades could have suffered. On the other hand, as my mother told me when she was young she did not go to a college, and so she had plenty of time to volunteer at a local hospital.
Secondly, the technological development has been providing teenagers with a myriad of entertainments, which oftentimes keep them away from social commitments. A variety of computer games fascinate millennials more than socializing with their peers or helping people who live nearby. For instance, my husband likes to tell stories about the time when he was about eighteen years old and was a member of a group of firefighters in a local fire department. He says that he always had a great time with his teammates and made a lot of friends out there. On the contrary, our son is not interested in such leisure at all. The only thing he wants to do when he is free from school is to play video games and watch TV. This example illustrates how technology has changed adolescents` away to live.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that modern young people are not involved in the life of their communities. This is because they are concentrated on their academic growth and distracted by technological devices.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 144, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'days'' or 'day's'?
Suggestion: days'; day's
...eration. Personally, I think that these days youth devote less time to their communi...
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Line 4, column 215, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd distracted by technological devices.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, secondly, so, for instance, i think, in conclusion, kind of, first of all, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1904.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74812967581 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95577188887 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563591022444 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.7119271554 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.7826086957 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4347826087 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5652173913 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180956376738 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0473631908993 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0458696067034 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106775878374 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0250007153981 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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