Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

The pace of modern life is incredibly fast and can be difficult to keep up with for many people. When teenagers have a job, they have a chance to learn how to deal with the life challenges. Personally, I think that it is beneficial for young people when their parents foster them to work. There are a few reasons why I hold this opinion.
First of all, an employment can provide teenagers with financial support. These days, an education is expensive and if high school students have a job, they can collect some money and help their parents to pay tutors. My own experience is a compelling example of this. Since ninth grade, I wanted to become a pharmacist and in my country, I had a chance to attend a pharmacy school for free. In order to do this, I had to have excellent grades and deep knowledge in chemistry, biology, and physics. I knew that private teachers could help me to acquire this knowledge. However, my parents were not rich people and could not pay for three tutors, and therefore, my mother advised me to take a part-time job, so we could afford to hire the professors. I followed her advice and for three years prior to the high school graduation, I was able to collect cash and pay for the tutoring. In fact, I passed entrance examinations and became a pharmacy college student.
Secondly, while working pupils can obtain skills, which are pivotal to have for their future professions. When young people know what kind of professional field they want to work in, they can find a job which is connected to this sphere and gain some experience. This will benefit them when they graduate a university because employers prefer to hire experienced workers. For instance, as a teenager, I was working as a pharmacy technician. From my seasoned co-workers, I have learned how to process claims to insurance companies, how to deal with angry customers and how to get along with a pharmacy team members. When I got my pharmaceutical license and started working as a pharmacist, these skills helped me be an effective employee and my supervisors have prised me a lot for great outcomes.
In a conclusion, I strongly believe that parents should inspire their teenage children to work. This is because it will help them to prepare for a college financially, and will provide them with an important expertise.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 220, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ovide them with an important expertise.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for instance, i think, in fact, kind of, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1920.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74074074074 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74259752475 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533333333333 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 594.9 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.0651528578 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.4285714286 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2857142857 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38095238095 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222719417592 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0661938044137 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0425118503755 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155581629163 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0441344622013 0.0645574589148 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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