Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The technological revolution has been changing our lives dramatically. Personally, I think that if people continue developing technology, they will struggle with its outcomes in the future. There are a few reasons why I hold this stance.
First of all, by elaborating new vehicles, companies contribute to the environmental decline on the planet. These days, cars are one of the sources of green gases, which cause global warming. If today, people do not stop overusing personal vehicles, they will be worthen already existing ecological problem. For instance, I have read in National Geographic magazine that the increase in the global temperature results in glaciers in the north to melt. Therefore, a lot of areas, where people live now, can be under water soon, and these people will have to migrate to different regions to find new homes. Although, some individuals argue that in the future, electric vehicles will replace the regular ones and in this way, will decrease the number of pollutants in the atmosphere, others claim that these cars are not as safe for the environment as ones think. That is why I believe that the development of automobiles can end up with a disaster for humans.
Secondly, machines replace manual labor and workers from all around the world have been losing their jobs. Nowadays, a lot of factories are equipped with different kind of machines, which perform a work that a couple decades ago was done by humans. The possibility that this process will continue in the future is enormous. My father`s experience is a compelling example of this. Five years ago, my dad was a carpenter and had a well-paid job at a factory. However, today, he is unemployed because the company he was working for decided to replace his colleagues and him with a computer-operated equipment, which is more efficient. In this way, my father had to look for new ways to make money for living. Despite the opinion that the ubiquitous technological development creates new professions, for people who lose their jobs, it takes a long time to recover financially and psychologically. This example illustrates how in the future, technological devices can take our jobs and make us suffer from unemployment.
To conclude, I strongly believe that people should think of the consequences of their behavior. This is because in the future we may live in the environmentally polluted world without opportunities to support our families.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 138, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...f people continue developing technology, they will struggle with its outcomes in ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, for instance, i think, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2047.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10473815461 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02323389098 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573566084788 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 658.8 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7273055138 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.4761904762 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0952380952 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95238095238 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105439001919 0.236089414692 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0307341594272 0.076458572812 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0239933423255 0.0737576698707 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0660060754136 0.150856017488 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00247506902638 0.0645574589148 4% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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