Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.
Modern people live incredibly busy lives and in order to excel, they have to be able to manage it. I personally agree that it is crucial for the youth to have well-developed organization skills. There are a few reasons why I hold this opinion.
First of all, an organized individual is able to manage his time effectively and benefit from it. These days, the majority of young people who gain an education in a college are in a deep debt in front of banks. This is because, in the contemporary society, a college education is incredibly expensive. If students are able to manage their time effectively, they can work while studying in a college, and in this way, they can start paying their student loans before a graduation. My own experience is a compelling example of this. My pharmaceutical education cost me a lot of money. When I just attended a pharmaceutical school, I thought that I would pay off my student loan solely within a few years after the graduation. However, since I planed each of my days very carefully in advance, I was capable of studying and working at the same time. In fact, I paid back a half of the debt while in college, and the rest of it just within one year after the graduation. This example illustrates the importance of being organized.
Secondly, a person, who is organized, has a lot of chances to advance in a career. Indeed, one of the most important characteristics of an employee is his ability to be at work on time and effectively organize a work process in order to get a great outcome. A worker, who is capable of this can be noticed by his employers and gain a career growth. As I said above, I was a quite organized young person. I have never been late to work and could effectively distribute my time at the workplace to get all assigned to me tasks done. In this way, after graduation a pharmaceutical school I was offered a position of a pharmacist in a company I worked for as a pharmacy technician during the years in the school. To that end, my advanced organizational skills helped me build my career.
To conclude, I strongly believe that being able to plan and organize is critical for young individuals. This is because it benefits them financially and gives them important career opportunities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 196, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...es them important career opportunities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, while, in fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1857.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 402.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61940298507 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96854148673 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497512437811 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 617.4 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.9456338592 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.4090909091 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2727272727 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.68181818182 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0868614201426 0.236089414692 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0262566313125 0.076458572812 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0377055448423 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0750916250715 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0445720036103 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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