Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
These days, money plays a significant role in the life of almost every person and therefore, they can be a great motivation for people to improve. Personally, I think that rewarding a child financially for excellent grades in school can benefit him. There are a few reasons why I hold this stance.
First of all, when parents pay their children for the success in school, the kids can enhance intellectually. If a child receives money for advanced marks, he will strive and study intensively since, on the money he gets, he will be able to afford toys he wants to play with. My brother`s experience is a compelling example of this. While a teenager, my sibling was nighty and did not succeed in school, especially in chemistry and math. Our parents tried their best to make him learn. They had conversations with him about the importance of education and hired private tutors, but nothing worked. Finally, they decided to give him money if he improved, so he could buy video games he liked to play. In fact, after a while, he caught up in the school subjects and even became one of the best students in his class. That is why I feel that by paying a child for high marks can help him learn more.
Secondly, when a kid is accustomed studying hard in school, even for money, he will not have problems to continue spending hours with books in a college, which will give him an opportunity to excel in life. In the modern world, an educated person has more chances to succeed than the one, who does not have a college degree because people with a profession have higher salaries and appreciated by the society. For instance, when my sibling, who I mentioned above, enhanced in math and chemistry in school, he found these disciplines incredibly interesting and decided to become a pharmacist, so he could study them in a college. Now, he is a professional and has a great job with a decent salary. Therefore, he is able to support his own family. Moreover, he always ready to give a valuable advice regarding medication to residents of our small community when they come to his pharmacy and they respect him for professionalism and dignity. This example illustrates how financially rewarding a child in a school can contribute to his future.
To conclude, I strongly believe that offering money to children for advanced grades in school is a great idea. This is because it will help them to become better students and prosper in the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ter students and prosper in the future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for instance, i feel, i think, in fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2069.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 438.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72374429224 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72390886986 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529680365297 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 651.6 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.6452536063 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0454545455 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9090909091 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.27272727273 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256890752326 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0870849254462 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0838272498597 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201193822743 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0858046262426 0.0645574589148 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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