Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
These days, money can be a great incentive to improve for a person of any age, even for a school student. Personally, I think that the idea of paying children for high grades in school by their parents is an excellent one. There are a few reasons why I hold this stance.
First of all, when children get paid for advanced marks, they can learn more. Kids depend on their parents financially and therefore, cannot afford any toy they want. If a child knows that he will be giving money for his success in school, he will strive to enhance and study hard, because, in this way, he will be able to purchase toys he desires. My brother`s experience is a compelling example of this. When my sibling was a teenager he was naughty and did not do well in school, especially in chemistry and math. And our parents decided to reward him with the dollar bills if he improved his grades, so he could buy video games he liked to play with. In this way, they gave him an impetus to study. As a result, he caught up in the school subjects he did not succeed before and even graduated school with excellence. That is why I believe that rewarding a kid financially can help him to become a better student.
Secondly, receiving money from parents for high marks in school can help children to become successful adults. When a pupil studies for money, he eventually gets accustomed to the learning process and has no problems to continue doing this in a college. In the modern world, a college or a university degree increases chances for people on advanced future, since the individuals with a degree have better salaries and appreciation from the society than those, who are not educated. For instance, my brother, who I mentioned above, decided to attend a university after the high school graduation. He told me that he got used spending hours studying when our parents started giving him money for his academical improvement, and it was not difficult for him to proceed to learn in the institution. Now, he is an engineer and has a great job, which let him support his own family financially. Moreover, he is respected by his colleagues for professionalism. This example illustrates a benefit for a child to be paid for excellent grades in school.
To conclude, I strongly believe that if parents come up with an idea to reward their growing kid with money for success in school, they will benefit him. This is because it will help him to increase intellectually and excel in life.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for instance, i think, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2039.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64464692483 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67900530838 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50569476082 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 631.8 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.8090719659 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.6818181818 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9545454545 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.90909090909 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298499021179 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100381910426 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0779767419644 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21965949424 0.150856017488 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0742419844087 0.0645574589148 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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