Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the modern world in order to succeed, businesses have to overcome a lot of challenges of competition and one of the ways to overcome these difficulties is to incorporate new methods into the work routine. Personally, I think that being risky and innovative is the key to success. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, businessmen who are not afraid to try something new can attract a lot of customers. These days, competition between companies is tremendous and if people want to win this, they have to surprise their clients with services, which they have never experienced before. My company's experience can provide a great illustration of this point. I work in a pharmacy and recently my supervisors decided to elaborate a new system to serve our customers in the best way. In short, the patients who had many prescriptions to fill every month, and whose scripts were written in different dates had the opportunity do not come back to the pharmacy every week to obtain their medications, but to get them all together once a month. They liked this a lot since it helped them to save time. Although at first, this innovation seemed arduous for the company to accomplish technically, we took a risk. In fact, our customers are truly happy with the new service and prefer our pharmacy to others.
Secondly, organizations, which tend to do things differently are interesting to work in and their employees appreciate them. When workers love their jobs, they care about their employment and because of that they work hard and in this way, they contribute to the prosperity of a firm. For instance, the organization that I work in is very versatile and its managers always try to improve the work process. In this way, they constantly create novel ways to perform familiar tasks. Because of that, for me as an employee, it is fascinating to be at work and never boring. Therefore, since I love my job, I strive to be a valuable member of the team and do my best. Moreover, I am planning to be with the company for many years and help to evolve it.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that it is more advantageous to risk that to continue doing only well-known things. This is because it helps businesses to obtain the loyalty of their buyers, and encourage their workers to work hard.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 236, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d encourage their workers to work hard.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, in fact, in short, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1938.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72682926829 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79410444171 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543902439024 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 607.5 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8190536574 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.9 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.1 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137928426219 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0414132441229 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0390909983463 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0854545461789 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.027220924212 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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