Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
A college education is an arduous and sometimes overwhelming process and it is important when students have an opportunity to relieve the tension they are continuously under. Personally, I think that in university funding sports and social activities as crucial as supporting classes and libraries. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, through sports activities, pupils can get emotional relieve, maintain their mental health and therefore, perform better in their studies. During physical exercises, young people move, increase blood flow and in this way receive a large amount of oxygen that is necessary for successful learning. My personal example is a compelling example of this. When I was in pharmacy school, my institution did not have a well-equipped gym, and so I had to drive far away from the campus in a local gym. It was time-consuming and expensive and because of this, I could do it only once a week. I believe that if my school had enough sports equipment, I could physically exercise more than I did and keep up with all my academic projects better. That is why in my opinion universities should sponsor sports.
Secondly, participation in social activities can help students to gain essential communication skills that will benefit them in their future careers. These days, most of the businesses are based on teamwork and success at a workplace mostly depends on how well employees can get along with their teammates. For instance, when I am a pharmacist and in a retail pharmacy, all crew members have to constantly interact with each other in order to provide a great customer service. Luckily when I was a college student my classmates and I took part in a variety of social projects such as volunteering at a local hospital. Through these activities, we learned how to help people and work together. As a result, when I started working in a pharmacy I have always been able to establish positive relationships with my colleagues and my employers have always praised me for this.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that colleges should equally finance sports, social activities, libraries, and classes. This is because it can help students to maintain their health and obtain crucial skills.
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Suggestion:
...their health and obtain crucial skills.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1903.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 378.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03439153439 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9371430268 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57671957672 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 590.4 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.5485714808 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.722222222 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.05555555556 5.45110844103 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13581880978 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0455652704992 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0549976682683 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0861301863338 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0354819705383 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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