Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
children are a crucial part of our society. every child has distinct own feature to do his or her activity well that depend on kind way of their parent select to support his or her ability. some people believe that parents should give money to their children when they get high score on exam, while others hold an opposite view. In my view, giving money to child is the best way for supporting them for two noticeable reasons.
The main reason is that by getting money children who take high grade in school be encouraged to try hardly. Obviously, motivation is the most important factor so as to force anybody to do their task good. when students notice that they can acquire money beside their studying, they push themselves to do their task very well. For example, when I was in high school, I wanted to get ride of school and went to at work. my father recommend me that if I did my studying good and went on it, he gave me 300 dollars. this rule gave me really huge inducement to follow my courses carefully. Frankly, I really did not care about schooling because I liked money in order to buy anything what I wanted. In the other words, I inadvertently passed my exams with high score. Consequently, I became the best pupil in school where there were 500 students. As you can see, allocating award for students be given inducement to them.
The another reason is that children can save more money that be taken from their parent when they get high mark on exam in school. some parents are perspective and try to help their children indirectly. The excellent method for that is that give their child money. this way has two benefit not only for their future life but also giving children the feeling of being good. Therefore, by giving money and reward children can progress all the time. For instance, when I was again in high school, I could save more money which my father me for getting high grade. Honestly, I felt that I had special ability to do everything. I acquired about 4000 dollars every years. As over time, when I graduated from university, I had huge saving which I tried hard to obtain it. Fortunately, I could get married sooner than my friends not having any money. this experience taught me that parents by giving money owing to my high grade impact my life circuitous.
in conclusion, parents should give money to their children who get high grade on exams if they want their children to progress quickly. Not only does it persuade them to do their studying harder, but also it help them saving more money for their future. All parents should determine specific approach for pushing their children in schooling.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, frankly, honestly, if, really, so, therefore, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 80.0 43.0788530466 186% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2203.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 471.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67728237792 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37446860635 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498938428875 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 665.1 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.9686845986 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 78.6785714286 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8214285714 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.10714285714 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.5376344086 289% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.395756755328 0.236089414692 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110424848751 0.076458572812 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.078256642232 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263921798603 0.150856017488 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0383933304765 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.08 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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