Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In today’s world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
everyone's personlity determine the level of success in the future. Indviduals according to their preferrences do only things that help them become successful person in today's world. Some people believe that prosperous persons do thier works quickly and risk even if they make mistakes, however others hold the opposite view and state that everybody should work correctly and presicely to prevent mistakes. In my opinion, taking risk and working quickly in spite of making mistakes is more essential than work slowly for two noticeable reasons.
The main reason is that mistakes during working quickly teach people what do next times. In other words, when individuals make mistakes become experienced and next situation try to do better. Consequencly, daring yourself and taking risk help individuals to learn new experience, although may face a lot of serious problems. For instance, when I started to take toefl exam, I had plenty of obstacle in the writing section. At first, I restrict me to write essay accurately without any false that caused not to finish on time. Unfortunately, my time was serious limitation because on toefl exam you had only 30 minutes to write. I decided to take risk and write quickly without taking care of accuracy instead of doing slowly. As over time, I could write faster and got high score on toefl exam. As you can see, taking risk and doing quickly help everyone to progress significantly.
The another reason is that taking risk and doing faster is the important element to increase the chace of success during life. daring people incline to work according to risk instead of slow, so they can succeed even if making mistake. While coward individuals who work with obsession and slow tend to do everything just correct, brave everyone taking risk often do several works simultaneously. Therefore, working lots of task at the same time lead to these individuals become successful. For example, my father never do anything else except for working only at shoes company. he had limited budget and his family faced a lot of problem because he did not take risk to do extra work. however, my aunt work in stock market, needing bold individuals who did not take care to making mistake, beside was teacher in school. As over time, she bought luxurious houses in uptown, whereas my family could not. if my father had tried to taking risk and working faster, now we would have excellent home.
In conclusion, the most important trait of successful people is that taking risk and work quickly is spite of making serious mistakes. Not only does it help individuals to become skilled, but also rise the chance of everyone to progress. we should work faster instead of slowly if want to be successful in today's world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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everyones personlity determine the level of succe...
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...hen I started to take toefl exam, I had plenty of obstacle in the writing section. At first, I res...
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...orks simultaneously. Therefore, working lots of task at the same time lead to these individu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, whereas, while, except for, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion, in other words, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2303.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 461.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99566160521 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56225464306 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522776572668 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 716.4 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.2552321337 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.12 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.44 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295547818774 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0885985749778 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0775290021592 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209007024197 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.057669429657 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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