Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Televisions have more negative effects on young people rather than positive effects to behave.
Although television as an invention has transformed the way of connection with the world like any other human creations has its own pros and cons. Opinions are divided on whether televisions affect juveniles’ acts more negatively or more positively. Personally, my firmed conviction is that TVs' negative impacts outweigh positive ones, leading impact negatively on youngsters' behavior. I will elaborate on my standpoint for two conspicuous reasons, stated in the ensuing lines.
The first worthwhile mentioning reason to support my point of view is that televisions are full of various programs and movies from over the world that the way they behave may conflict with the way we behave. Therefore, teenagers will behave unlikely than their society’s expectations. My nephew's behavior is an apt illustration of this. He was used to watching loads of American movies in which American kids can call elders by their first name that in our culture it is an offensive act. Consequently, he habituated to call my father even other people on the street by their first name. Indeed, his act was an awful shame that embraced me many times. Had my nephew never watch those American movies too much, he would not behave in a way that embraces me.
The second remarkable point to champion my stance is that nowadays televisions, unfortunately, are full of programs or movies with violence and porn content, which have a serious negative impact on children's mental and behaviors. My young brother's action is a compelling example to clarify this. Recently, he was acting very angry whereas he was known for his kind behavior with everyone. After some days of close attention to his daily life, I realized that is watching two to three action movies with a load of violent scenes per day. As a result, I managed to nip the negative change in his behavior in the bud, and he became the same person that he was. Had my little brother watched those more appropriate movies, He could not act in a way that was unlike him.
To wrap up what has been discussed, I reckon that televisions affect youngsters more negatively. This is because televisions show movies from different nations with different cultures that may not be alongside our culture that teenagers can not distinguish them. Besides, televisions are full of programs with violent content that learn them to behave inappropriately.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 366, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'youngsters'' or 'youngster's'?
Suggestion: youngsters'; youngster's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, first, if, may, second, so, therefore, whereas, while, i reckon, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1986.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02784810127 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80728559778 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567088607595 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 622.8 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.0165247437 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.3 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.75 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145486007671 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0470310758541 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0380831329518 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0979422484285 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0300917679636 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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