Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In today’s world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct.
It is critically important people manage their occupation in a functioning way, because all aspects of their lives depend on it. Personally, I believe working fast and accepting potential risks are vital for businesses to thrive. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explain in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, the job market is highly competitive these days, which makes it necessary for employees to be adaptable as quickly as they can. Since most businesses are trying to defeat their competitors by hiring the most compatible workforce, workers should be able to fulfill various tasks in a short time, so they are hired in fine positions. In such a scenario, those who put being agile above cautious are more fortunate to have the job. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. About five years ago, I earned a job in a high-tech company. The job instruction specifically required me to finish the tasks first, and then evaluate them to make it better or flawless. Our team was developing a software for computers, and it had minor error. Eventually, the company decided to release it and improve it by giving updates, because it was our priority to stay in the market. Moreover, there was another company offering the same product, and they were persistent to provide the software with no bugs in it, which was time-consuming and they lost the chance to have the market.
Furthermore, many technological advances are available now, which will reduce the risk in process of rapid working. There is a myriad of software and computer programs, which allow users to define a solid procedure with a minimum range of risks. These programs and the internet have made it possible to do work at high speed and low risks in the result. For instance, fifty years ago, there was nearly no centralized bank system based on the internet, and not only was accounting a sensitive task, but also time taking with the potential human mistakes in the process and outcome. On the contrary, the internet and user-friendly applications for accounting has established an integrated online network for vocations to do their jobs faster and accurately than a half of century ago, regardless the place or time. Therefore, technology gives a hand to businesses for working faster and least wrongdoing.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that to work for a short time and facing its challenges is rationally important for venues. This is because competitiveness in work is a moment issue these days, and technology assists workers in lessening the venture of work in a risky high-speed situation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 59, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a functioning way" with adverb for "functioning"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...mportant people manage their occupation in a functioning way, because all aspects of their lives dep...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2174.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 438.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96347031963 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8647937487 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579908675799 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 701.1 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.9063846683 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.7 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.65 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146913980567 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0420744043674 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0371539785421 0.0737576698707 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0923607809156 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0240850291141 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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