Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Twenty years from now, people will have more time for leisure activities.
Relaxation has been an appealing topic in our modern society. Workers nowadays widely argue that two decades from now, people might be able to have more spare time. In my personal viewpoint, I approve of this argument.
In the first place, what I put in my priority is development of science. It cannot be denied that as technology has been growing dramatically, more and more modern machines have been invented. This induces that machines are alternating people to do a lot of tasks. For instance, to produce a bowl, while in the past, artists needed to complete every part by hand, modern machines do the predominant works nowadays. As a result, artists are required to take part in less work, thereby having time for their own hobbies. More importantly, the development of sciences leads to the enhancement of people’s skills. Indeed, universities are being better and better. As a consequence, students are strongly likely to enjoy excellent lessons in their colleges. Hence, they are bound to have skills to efficiently complete all the works required. Therefore, in the future, they tend to have more and more time for relaxation. By and large, as long as time passes, science develops; people’s more free working experiences induce.
In the second place, community bonds hold no less importance. The fact is that twenty years from now, workers’ social skills are certain to supremely develop. Undoubtedly, people tend to get involved better with others, thus creating tight bond in working community. Undoubtedly, teamwork creates strength, enabling workers to together solve the hardest parts of projects in incredibly short time. Therefore, workers might complete their work efficiently. For example, in the past, people usually did work in their own. Some actually could come up with exceptional ideas, but it took relatively long time for them to reach to their results. Things have changed drastically, as people nowadays cooperate well with their teammates. Hence we could come up with numerous excellent inventions. Science are continuously growing and so does science. We actually do not know how magically things will be in the future due to better and better teamwork skill.
In conclusion, these mentioned above are convincing reasons for my approval. It is strongly recommended that labors worldwide should take my writing into detailed consideration to come up with best decisions.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 736, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, hence, second, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, by and large, in the first place, in the second place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2043.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30649350649 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86216088265 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 629.1 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.0613285093 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 75.6666666667 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.2592592593 20.6045352989 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.62962962963 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264465584424 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0632566887386 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0599060039976 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144072608753 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0593519981632 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.93 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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