Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as libraries and should receive equal financial support.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people argue that class and libraries are more pivotal than extra curriculum activities such as sports and social activities. So, class and libraries should receive more financial funds than extra activities. They cite class and libraries makes people academically smart and helps them to compete on global market. However, I strongly disagree with these people and believe that financial for sports and social activities should be commensurate with class and libraries, and extra curriculum activities are as crucial as class and libraries. I will support my viewpoint with two reasons.
To begin with, social activities and sports are equal significant as physical classes and libraries because sports can be milestone for many students who really keen to make them as profession. For instance, Cristiano Ronaldo, Lionel Messi are epitome of renowned soccer players who choose their profession on sports from beginning of their universities and college life. In the past, if their universities were not provide them to play then we would not get true gem like them. It is important to encourage sports as profession at universities and colleges because there are many Leon Messi and Cristiano Ronaldo hide behind the scene in educational institutes who are really passionate about sports and waiting for a platform to flourish their talents. Thus, there should be financial parity between extra curriculum and classes and libraries.
In spite of numerous importance of classes and libraries and providing more funding to them for utilizing those funding to increasing e-books, adding advance computers and comfy seats helps to students to gain more knowledge and compete in contemporary job market. However, providing equal funding on sports and social activities also brought sanguine impacts on physical and mental health of students. For instance, monotonous lecture and daily hectic assignment brings stress and anxiety in students. Hence, extra curriculum such as sports, music and various social activities keep students physically healthy and reduce all hypertensions and catharsis from daily hectic life. Moreover, there is no suspicious that those universities which do not provide equal financial emphasis to sports and social activities is main cause for mental and physical deterioration of students. It is crucial for students to keep physical and mental health because it reduces stress and able to compete further in future. Thus, sports and social activities act as antidotes for physical and mental health.
To sum up, the issue of whether the funding support for sports and social activities should be equal as classes and libraries is complex. Some have suggested that classes and libraries should be provide more because in this competitive global only academic strong students can sustain on it. Nevertheless, I still contend that equal funding should be receive for sports and social activities and that they would encouraging those who wants sports as career and keep physical and mental health healthy due to daily mundane lectures.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: provided
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Message: Did you mean 'received'?
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Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'encourage'
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, really, so, still, then, thus, for instance, such as, in spite of, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 42.0 13.8261648746 304% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2591.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 476.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44327731092 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69090913727 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.445378151261 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 797.4 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.0321148305 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.55 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05 5.45110844103 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248218020198 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0902086887474 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0608773684544 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169214522927 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0332980320601 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 11.7677419355 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 10.9000537634 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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