Do you agree or disagree with the following statement At universities and colleges sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Some people argue that sports and social activities are not that important for the development of children and thus support the argument that they should not get equal financial support. They cite that the education is the key factor in the student's development and they can do just fine without sports and social activity. However, I strongly disagree with this and believe that sports and social activities have crucial role in children's all-round development and should have equal financial support.
First of all, sports in itself is very expensive to manage because of the sporting facility, organizing competitions, meals and other things. For example, one of my friend play athletics for the university team, and he is very dependent on the sports department to provide him with training facilities, proper meal, and transportation to go in various competitions. Apart from this, he train in free time after class so he can not do part time job because that will interfere his training timing. He can manage his expenses because sports department is paying for him, but if university cut down the funds, he can not even have proper nutritious meal to stay fit and healthy and then there are other expensive such as training and transportation. Because sports can be a career for many students, and if they did not receive proper funding, many student have to force themselves to work in a field they do not like. So, I think that it is very important to provide equal financial support to the sports.
Secondly, social activities are an integrated part of a society and the best way to provide help and support to the marginalized groups. For instance, during my collage days, I was group head of a not profit organization, and our primary role was to provide free education, meal, and clothing to the poor kids. We used to teach them after our classes, and for the meal and clothing, we were heavily dependent on the volunteer itself. Even after so many request to the administration, they refuse to help us, stating that they do not consider it important and rather we should focus on our studies. Because of lack of money, we had to close our organization and eventually stopped teaching kids. Later we found out that those kids drop out of schools because their family had a hard time earning, and they can not afford additional tuition for their children. Had the university provided us fund, those student would have had better future. Thus, I think that both sports and social activities should have equal financial support.
To conclude, this is a complex issue to decide that whether sports and social activities and equally important. Nevertheless, I still contend that they are an integral part of our lifestyle, and thus they should be provided with equal financial support.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ot that important for the development of children and thus support the argument t...
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Line 1, column 243, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
... the education is the key factor in the students development and they can do just fine w...
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Line 2, column 245, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...y team, and he is very dependent on the sports department to provide him with training...
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Line 2, column 387, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'trains'.
Suggestion: trains
...rious competitions. Apart from this, he train in free time after class so he can not ...
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Line 2, column 435, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
... free time after class so he can not do part time job because that will interfere his tra...
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Line 2, column 842, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun student seems to be countable; consider using: 'many students'.
Suggestion: many students
...if they did not receive proper funding, many student have to force themselves to work in a f...
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Line 3, column 449, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun request seems to be countable; consider using: 'many requests'.
Suggestion: many requests
... on the volunteer itself. Even after so many request to the administration, they refuse to h...
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Line 3, column 897, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this student' or 'those students'?
Suggestion: this student; those students
...n. Had the university provided us fund, those student would have had better future. Thus, I t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, then, thus, apart from, as to, for example, for instance, i think, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 13.8261648746 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2327.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 472.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93008474576 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68369155037 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476694915254 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 711.9 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.0854119376 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.473684211 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8421052632 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.21052631579 5.45110844103 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253300034761 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0968245197493 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0912356487312 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188703550216 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0762956823613 0.0645574589148 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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