Participating in sports activities and studying in the libraries are two prime parts of the daily life of a college student. Due to study considered as the most important thing, it is advisable to spend more money on libraries in some people's opinion. Contrary to their viewpoints is my perspective that the same amount of money should be given to students' sports activities, on account of its contribution to encouraging students to do exercises and allowing students to make friends with others.
In the first place, among all the benefits of spending the same money to support students' sports activities, the most critical merit is the encouragement of exercises to students. College students these days are overwhelmed by tremendous workloads on academic study, and therefore have no time for relaxation, not to mention physical exercises. With regard to some students suffering from bad health conditions caused by lack of exercises, a well-equipped gym and playground can help them considerably. Hence, it is very necessary for universities to give the same amount of money to establish the gym and playground. Take my experience as an example. When I first entered my university, there was no usable gyms and suitable playground for me to do physical exercises. Due to the lack of exercise and overburdened schoolwork, my health condition was worse and worse. Fortunately, in my sophomore year, my university decided to spend money on building a well-equipped gym, which became an impetus for me to involve myself in exercises.
In addition, another primary benefit of the equal money spent in sports activities revolves around the possibility for social interaction provided by newly established gym and playground. Nowadays, less and less students are engaged in the discussions and communication with peers and consequently, a large percentage of students have no sincere friends. There is no doubt that the gym and playground can serve as social and vibrant platforms for social interaction. With constant and continuous interaction during sports, college students can easily form and keep friendship with others. For instance, after the gym established, I went to the gym quite frequently and got acquainted with other students. We played badminton on a regular basis and had frequent collaboration. As a result, we formed a steady and prolonged friendship with others and I was grateful for the gym.
In a nutshell, due to the fact that spending the same money could bulid well-equipped gyms and playground, students can be encouraged to engage themselves in sports and extent their friend circles. Hence, I support that the universities spend as the same amount money to their students' sports activities as they give to their libraries.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 236, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...o spend more money on libraries in some peoples opinion. Contrary to their viewpoints i...
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Line 5, column 208, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun students is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
... gym and playground. Nowadays, less and less students are engaged in the discussions...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, hence, if, so, therefore, well, for instance, in addition, no doubt, as a result, with regard to, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2320.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27272727273 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09746630662 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497727272727 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 719.1 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.5299903288 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.0 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.1 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239004411411 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0788860415093 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108278429429 0.0737576698707 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177570755009 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0911652615423 0.0645574589148 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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