This topic is concerned about which factor is more important in succeeding, hard work or luck. I believe hard work is more accountable for what people have achieved, but I do not think that luck has anything to do with the success. Therefore, I disagree with the presented statement. I will explore specific reasons in detail in the following paragraphs.
Firstly, luck is not sufficient to achieve a goal. I am a university student, and I have to take tests on numerous occasions. When I do not study very hard, it is undeniably impossible to pass the exam, no matter how hard I pray. However, it may be the case that I have the slightest hope of passing the exam if I have the luck, provided that I am on the brink of passing it or failing it. My experience is a compelling example of this. When I was a sophomore, I had to take an algebra exam. I had not prepared for it until the previous day, which is why I had to spend the whole night putting theories in memory. I was half giving up, so all I could do after the test was pray. At length it was really fortunate that I could pass it. I assumed it was contributed by the luck. Drawing from this experience, luck has something to do with the success.
Another reason I argue luck is involved in the success is that the environment is always changing. Personally, I play the violin and I have had some experience of participating in the competitions. When I am entrapped in the gigantic hall and sieged by the totally silent audience, I get overwhelmed by the whole atmosphere. When those circumstances get over me, I sometimes lose consciousness, which ruins the following performance. It is regrettable, but I believe whether I faint or not depends on the luck because it happened however hard I had practiced before. After all, this example demonstrates how people's performance is dependent on the environment, which means they need luck to accomplish a perfect performance.
These two reasons support my viewpoint. In other words, it is not an exaggeration to state that luck has very much to do with success. Therefore I disagree with the presented statement.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 674, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'prayed'.
Suggestion: prayed
...p, so all I could do after the test was pray. At length it was really fortunate tha...
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Line 7, column 136, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... luck has very much to do with success. Therefore I disagree with the presented statement...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, may, really, so, therefore, after all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1751.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 377.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64456233422 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95027710156 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509283819629 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 557.1 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.3337155943 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.9583333333 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7083333333 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.625 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319396534789 0.236089414692 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0866203765835 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0813201921084 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221287672283 0.150856017488 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0940384713596 0.0645574589148 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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