Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? When starting a new job, our ability to adapt to a new environment is more important than our excellent knowledge for the job.
People today find it harder to start a new job, and different people adopt distinctive strategies. Some value the ability to adapt to a new environment more than our excellent knowledge for the job. However, I do not think it always right. Since these two kinds of qualities are all indispensable as starting a new job, we cannot say that one is always superior to the other.
First of all, the solid knowledge associated with the job is irreplaceable, for it is the primary reason why a company recruits us. In other words, as we hunt for a job, we need to showcase an excellent understanding of the job to the human resource managers before being hired. Every company today tends to hire people competent enough to make a contribution, which is why having solid knowledge for the job will be a huge advantage. Also, having excellent knowledge about the job contributes to adaptation to a new company. Sound knowledge for the job usually equals the ability to solve problems that others cannot tackle. Thus we have more possibilities to stand out. If we actually have excellent knowledge of the job, coworkers in the companies will admire us because of that. Of course, this will offer more opportunities to make more friends. As a result, we are more likely to fit into the new environment more quickly.
At the beginning of a new job, being able to adapt to a new environment means that we are capable of establishing a good relationship with others in a short time. This quality evidently is important because no matter how well we do our jobs, we still need cooperation from others. Better adaptive capacity enables us soon to get support from others when we are in need. Besides, being capable of adapting to the new environment makes us learn more from the job. Since we can establish a good relationship with others, these people may become our close friends. A lot of them may even become our mentors or trainers voluntarily. They are willing to share their experiences related to jobs with us. They also will teach us whatever they know. On these occasions, we are more likely to have excellent knowledge of the job.
Since adaptability and excellent knowledge are indispensable but promote each other, it is illogical to claim that each one is more important than the other.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Thus,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, first, however, if, may, so, still, thus, well, of course, as a result, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1907.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80352644836 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78639748393 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496221662469 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 621.0 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.649522701 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.9130434783 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2608695652 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.65217391304 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.432362812352 0.236089414692 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139179036093 0.076458572812 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112525926898 0.0737576698707 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.282039553501 0.150856017488 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0959549406806 0.0645574589148 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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