Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities

First of all,teen’s education is harder than before. Hence, they have to study more and more compare it to the time of our elders. One good example is my country. In Korea Daechi-dong has many academies and that place is the hardest and prestigious area to study. Unfortunately, young people have to study and they do not have time helping their communities. Because of this every school requires students to volunteer for communities for 15 hours in one year.

Secondly, most young people do not want to help their communities. They need to help themselves before society. For example, if I want to help my community. I have to do my chores and obligations first. However, my work is so much and I am so busy. Therefore, I do not have enough time to help my communities to do my work.

In conclusion, young people want to help their communities but they can’t help their community. Because they do not have enough time to help their communities and their own work. According to my two reasons. First, teen’s education is harder than before. So they have to do their study. Second reason is young people do not want to help their communities.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 13, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , teen
First of all,teen’s education is harder than before. Henc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 11.0286738351 9% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 52.1666666667 48% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 955.0 1977.66487455 48% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 202.0 407.700716846 50% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72772277228 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76996954942 4.48103885553 84% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74500821332 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 93.0 212.727598566 44% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.460396039604 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 296.1 618.680645161 48% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 11.0 20.1344086022 55% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.2551381854 48.9658058833 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 53.0555555556 100.406767564 53% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 11.2222222222 20.6045352989 54% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 5.83333333333 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.338705968174 0.236089414692 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125230264179 0.076458572812 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.132899090285 0.0737576698707 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.26682205368 0.150856017488 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0959736611174 0.0645574589148 149% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.5 11.7677419355 55% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.77 58.1214874552 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.97 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.0 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 86.8835125448 41% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.4 10.0537634409 64% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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