Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? young people in the past were dependent on their parents to make their own decisions too much but these days young people make their decisions for their life lonely.
The right of making a decision is an undeniable fact that has changed throughout history. Opinions are divided that whether youth individuals have more independence of decision-making or today's young people have more independence of that. Personally, It is my firmed idea that in current days, youngsters have more independent to make their own decision for their lives, I will develop my standpoint of view for two concrete reasons which have been stated in the subsequent paragraphs.
Firstly, thanks to the advanced modern era a plethora of sources have been provided for young people of which can decide personally whereas youths in the old days accessed only to their experienced-parents. To be more specific, just the invention of the internet has made decision-making much easier than in ancient times. My own experience of attending an abroad university is an apt illustration of this. Last year l had such a hard time in which how can I persuade my studies overseas. Inasmuch as I did not want to evolve my family I went through deep researches on the internet, which resulted in good for me, having made my mind. Therefore, due to the internet, the valuable gift of the current modern world, I managed to make my mind without any help from my family.
The second worthwhile mentioning reason is that the parent's experiences are not only not the first-haded bout also are less useful as they used to in the past, nowadays. In the other words, today's era has changed severely compared completely to the past so that the experience of parents can not be practiced by their children. My friend's decision to attend landscape architecture is a compelling example of this. Two years earlier, he was wondering if he studies landscape architecture, it will be the right choice, but he was not sure. Although he turned to his father to get his opinion, his father as a farmer had no idea regarding landscape architecture. Consequently, he borrowed other people's minds to decide whether to attend the landscape architecture program or not. As a result, It can be inferred that young social members are not dependent on parents, nowadays.
To wrap up what has been discussed, I strongly support the idea that youngsters in the current time are not dependent on their parents to make their own decisions. I feel this way because the advanced modern world has provided youths with technology to make decisions easier. Besides, parent's experiences are not usable as they used to in the past.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 700, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'minds deciding'.
Suggestion: minds deciding
...Consequently, he borrowed other peoples minds to decide whether to attend the landscape archite...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, first, firstly, if, regarding, second, so, therefore, whereas, while, i feel, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2073.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94749403341 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95222582128 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520286396181 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 649.8 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.0571902313 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.105263158 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0526315789 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47368421053 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280019743482 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.080510988082 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0717845439075 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190960913361 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0749388236289 0.0645574589148 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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