Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people should
choose a job that is similar to what their parents did
The era we are living in is modern technology time, there is so much advancement in every field of life like in education, jobs, and health. In old times there were not so many options for people to choose their dream jobs, while some young people follow their parents and some parents believe that their kids should mimic their job choices. personally, I believe kids should make their own decisions their parents should guide them not to dictate them. when young people do work according to their wishes, it brings positive productivity. I feel that way for a couple of reasons which I am going to elaborate in following essay.
One of the most important reasons is that they feel the freedom of decision and they become more confident in professional but also in personal life. parents should advise them but not take over there important decisions of kid's life. when a father forces his son do as same as he does for living, they will might confuse in their rest of life to make good decisions. On the other hand, if parents encourage kids to choose their career by themself it will bring positive change in kids, they believe in their power of decisions.To illustrate, my own life is an example of it. I am from a family from a teaching background, my mother is a teacher and my father is a professor ina college. my dream was to becom a doctor and my parents supported me a lot during my journey. Now I am successful in my profession and in my life.
Furthermore, when kids choose their own future jobs, they will be more motivated and determinative. Say for example someone wants to persue their career in fine arts and their parents want them to do business ,although, they might do it because their parents wants them to do but they nerver be happy and satisfied with their jobs and obiously prodectivity will effective. instead of this if young people jobs thats brings them happynesss and satifaction no matter if they can not make a smart amout of money but they become a positive member of society. my younger sister is artist, she chooses by her self because she loves the arts and my parents gave her freedom to choose career.
In conclusion, it is more better to let young people choose their own career instead to follow their parent's choice, because it gives them a more confident person and positive member of the society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, so, while, as to, for example, i feel, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1938.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64748201439 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48413931445 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.474820143885 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 603.9 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.2911979082 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.0 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5294117647 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.82352941176 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274827036854 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.09305082181 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0867360185922 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198197667956 0.150856017488 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0783434826093 0.0645574589148 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.99 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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