Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Young adults are considered to be the cornerstone among most societies. They represent the future for every country. Therefore, most governments tend to take care of them in order to have future development. However, I think young people today are still do not have any role in big governmental decisions. I feel this way for a couple of reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, the advent of technology isolates kids from interacting with the community. They spend most of their time either on their cell phones chatting with friends, or they play some advance video games such as Play Station And X-box. For example, my nephew Mohammed spends more than six hours playing his favorite game Fort Night. He does not have any time to help his mother in cleaning the house or washing the clothes. Ironically, he will not help the community in cutting trees or managing the traffic in the neighborhood. Apparently, teenagers today do not think about anything except their games.
Adding to the previous point, most governments today do not trust on teens. They do not involve them to participate in big decisions such as voting for the new governor in the city. For instance, in my hometown Saudi Arabia, the government have a strict policy in voting for the governor positions. They do not allow teens to vote, the voters have to be forty years old in order to vote. As a result, young adults without doubt will not make any important decisions that might help their community in the future.
In conclusion, I think teens today do not have any impact decisions on societies. This is not only because the arrival of technology makes them busy, but also, most governments do not involve teens in big decisions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, however, so, still, therefore, for example, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1440.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 299.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81605351171 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57446020092 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548494983278 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 449.1 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.0082290419 48.9658058833 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 80.0 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6111111111 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.22222222222 5.45110844103 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168038905002 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0562029747447 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0415777692768 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109865820234 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0380767336625 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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