Nowadays, with the enormous development in all over the world, the whole society need to contribute to make policies in a country no matter gender and years old. In my opinion, however, young people have involved not enough in making decisions that guide the future of their country. I feel this way for several reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, the leader generation today are too old and many of them are working in the government for a long time. Therefore, there are no opportunity for young people to involve to the politic's environment and limit their contributions for the development of the country. My personal experiment from my country is a compelling example of it. In my home town, the local government are all of the people in my parent's old and even older. They have much experience in leading an province; however, they don't have much knowledge about the current changing in technology. Thus, the policies they made, which affect directly to the young people, are not appropriate. For example, the president in my province are banded some company in the internet security field. They considered them as a hacker company that may harm the society. However, they don't know about the white hacker that can help the government to prevent the attact from bad hackers. The young people in my home town could not contribute anything in the decisions because the president and his gorvement are looking down the ability of young generation today.
Secondly, young people today do not care much about politics. The main concerns in young people life are about their school, their job, their friend. Young age is the time when people want to play with friend and explore the world. Almost people in this age want to make this time more meaningfull by having long trip to the other place and even to the other country. Since, they could not spend many time to watch the politics chanel in television to obtain the current situation round their life.
In conclusion, I agree with the idea that young people today have not enough opportunity to make vital decision that guide the development of the society. This is because the leaders are too old and took off the oportunity of young people, and young people care about the other things rather than politics and social problems.
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 389, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... my home town, the local government are all of the people in my parents old and even older...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 478, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...r. They have much experience in leading an province; however, they dont have much ...
^^
Line 2, column 505, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...e in leading an province; however, they dont have much knowledge about the current c...
^^^^
Line 2, column 846, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...hat may harm the society. However, they dont know about the white hacker that can he...
^^^^
Line 3, column 368, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...er place and even to the other country. Since, they could not spend many time to watc...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 396, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun time seems to be countable; consider using: 'many times'.
Suggestion: many times
...er country. Since, they could not spend many time to watch the politics chanel in televis...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 480, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...levision to obtain the current situation round their life. In conclusion, I agre...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for example, i feel, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1758.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82967032967 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46251942777 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489010989011 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 552.6 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.324531648 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.5263157895 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1578947368 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94736842105 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204095968692 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0660422916772 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0616337655769 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155820548948 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0496680671903 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 389, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... my home town, the local government are all of the people in my parents old and even older...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 478, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...r. They have much experience in leading an province; however, they dont have much ...
^^
Line 2, column 505, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...e in leading an province; however, they dont have much knowledge about the current c...
^^^^
Line 2, column 846, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...hat may harm the society. However, they dont know about the white hacker that can he...
^^^^
Line 3, column 368, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...er place and even to the other country. Since, they could not spend many time to watc...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 396, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun time seems to be countable; consider using: 'many times'.
Suggestion: many times
...er country. Since, they could not spend many time to watch the politics chanel in televis...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 480, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...levision to obtain the current situation round their life. In conclusion, I agre...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for example, i feel, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1758.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82967032967 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46251942777 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489010989011 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 552.6 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.324531648 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.5263157895 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1578947368 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94736842105 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204095968692 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0660422916772 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0616337655769 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155820548948 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0496680671903 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.