Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

A Controversial issue related to whether youngsters play a crucial role on decision making for the foreseeable future or not, has been brought to the attention of specialists who study evolution of society. many people believe that young people are incapable of making important decisions that will reflect in the future. On the contrary, I believe that students have a huge impact on decisions that are taken from government.

First of all, nowadays, young adults have many opportunities to make their voice heard. They are considered as a back bone of society. Students are actively involved in political rallies and help to shine light on critical issues that directly effect people's rights. For example, recently we are experiencing a turmoil on our society. Racism is one of issues that young people are raising their voice. They want government to implement laws that will ban people from expressing racism against any ethnic group. As we have seen, the government is working hard to establish fair laws for all. This example tells us the issues that a brought up by young adults, are already been heard. If young population do not raise their voice, the government would not pay close attention to those issues that bothers not only students but also the entire society.

Second, youths of this modern era have a higher level of education. They involve themselves on a wide range of projects that are undertaken from their companies where they work. They creativity is always embraced by the government. For instance, the example of my brother is a compelling example of this. A decade ago, after my brother graduated from a prestigious college as an Engineer. He worked as a specialist on his field for a big company. There he had the chance to work on implementing new guidelines, which were recommended directly to government. His brilliant ideas were heard and were taken into consideration. If he had never finished that college and worked for that big company, he might never would have had the chance to suggest his new ideas. This is a clear example of the strong influence of the young generation on the future of this country.

In conclusion, young adults have a big influence in decision making. This is because they always involve themselves in political activities, and because they have high education, which allows them to suggests new ideas that would make the world a better place to live.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 208, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Many
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Line 7, column 185, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... because they have high education, which allows them to suggests new ideas that w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, first of all, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2018.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98271604938 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69618323826 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511111111111 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 633.6 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.1791812786 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.0833333333 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.875 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.375 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139372731035 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0434945896691 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.048577375316 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0939303649931 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0277992576809 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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