Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Traveling is one of the most crucial parts of people's live. It is thought by some people that people should travel and learn more about their country, rather than travel abroad. However, I believe that people would benefit more if they explore foreign countries. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore as follows.
To begin with, people would be able to benefit more from traveling abroad because they would gain more knowledge by learning about different cultures. They will become open minded and understand their own culture even better. My own experience as a student, is a compelling example of this. Two decades ago, I enrolled myself to students exchanged program. I studied in Spain for one year. The reason why I was interested to do that, was because I wanted to know more about other countries history and culture. After I traveled around the Spain and enjoyed every moment, I really valued my culture even more. In addition, staying in Spain for a year, sparked my curiosity to learn more about things that I did not know about my country. Therefore, I was able to broaden my knowledge and understand better.
Secondly, people who travel to foreign countries could benefit by checking and finding out different opportunities such as types of jobs that they would like to do, or expanding their social network. For instance, my brother was passionate to travel around the world. Actually, he had visited almost every developed country. He had a wide social circle, wich helped him to find connections and fulfill his goals. Furthermore, he was able to built his own business overseas, just because of these opportunities that he got from having a wide social network. If he would not have traveled abroad, he would never had been able to expand his social circle and fulfill his goals. Overall, It is clear that people would benefit more if they travel to foreign countries.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that if people travel abroad they would benefit even more than they would travel to their own country. This is because they could broaden their knowledge and because they could be able to expand their social network , which would help them to fulfill their plans.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 481, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'countries'' or 'country's'?
Suggestion: countries'; country's
...cause I wanted to know more about other countries history and culture. After I traveled a...
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Line 7, column 250, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...d be able to expand their social network , which would help them to fulfill their ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, furthermore, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1838.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90133333333 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44418800469 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.474666666667 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 556.2 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.3190786003 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.5454545455 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0454545455 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.77272727273 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263850831243 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.08340908587 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0780372126514 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177668153431 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0248821704786 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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