Tpo 20. Do you agree or disagree with the statement. Successful people try new things and take risks than only do what they know how to do well.
Taking risks is not an easy decision, but that would lead people toward success. It is thought by some people that people could succeed only if they know very well what they are doing. However, I personally think that people are successful because they are willing to take risks throughout their lifetime. I feel this way for two reasons that I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, contrary to the belief that successful people don't take risks, evidence shows that people were able to reach their success because they took many risks in their lives. Success do not come easy, people had to work very hard and sacrifice to reach their goals. For example, a recent research conducted by the university of Toronto has shown that 89 percent of people who took risks in their lives were able to succeed. In contrast, people who were not successful or did nor reached their goals, did not take any risk at all. According to this research, it is clear that successful people did take risks in order to become successful.
Secondly, it is significantly important to consider the fact that people who want to succeed are always eager to try everything, so they could come up with new ways that have the potential to help them to thrive. Successful people are creative and do not fear from the unknown. My experience is a compelling example of this. About five years ago, my brother opened his own business. At that time, he did not have enough knowledge about that job, so he started to search and try everything that he thought was going to help his business to succeed. He took risks, but all his tries were paid off. As a result, my brother became a successful businessman. After few years, he was still in search of new things, which made him to exceed his expectations. Therefore, the eagerness for more success would never stop successful people to continue trying new things.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that successful people take more risks than just do what they know better. This is due to the fact that successful people are eager to try new things all the time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: don't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, well, for example, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1730.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70108695652 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42359010327 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521739130435 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 515.7 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.2098405335 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.5 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.95 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.333042702806 0.236089414692 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108850340586 0.076458572812 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0919895424534 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.243271198124 0.150856017488 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0914802381825 0.0645574589148 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.15 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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