Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
With the development of Television, people's lives is changed. Many people believe that Movies and TV shows that young people watch have negatively effected their behavior. In my opinion, young adults, will become better individuals just by getting inspired and spending their free time in an effective way.
The first vital point to bear in mind is that many children have been positively inspired by different movies that they have seen. Watching movies, which convey fascinating content would influence young adults in different ways. For example, around two decades ago, when I was a teenager, I watched Gray's Anatomy series. Those series, really influenced my career choice. As I grew older, I wanted to become a doctor, actually I wanted to followed the footsteps of one of my favorite characters in the movie. It turn out that I became a real doctor in reality. I was inspired by that movie, which positively changed my life. If I had never watched that movie, I might have never become a doctor, who knows, probably something else.
The second noteworthy reason is because students who spend their leisure time watching TV, they might learn something completely new, which will help them to expend their knowledge. Many TV programs provide educational context such as "Know more about Science" or "The Ancient History". Young learners could learn from them. For instance, when my nephew was a teenager, he was obsessed with the outer space. I remember him spending his free time watching TV, especially Cosmos programs. Consequently, he knew everything about planets, even more than someone that was at same age as he was or even older than him. Because of the availability of these educational programs, my nephew was able to not only broaden their knowledge, but also entertain himself with things that he enjoyed.
In conclusion, I believe that TV shows and movies positively will effect young adults. This is because that will help them to became better adults, and because they will be able to spend their free time in an effective way by educating themselves.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, if, really, second, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1758.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 344.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11046511628 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66765448961 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.563953488372 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.2236248988 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.9 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165070749822 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0524473339701 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0608200100647 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121445427718 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0700751735268 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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