Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? young people today have influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.
In the modern era, every individual expects and tries to change their society and not to give up to their so called destiny. The controversial question which arises here is whether young people today have influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole. This idea has many opponents and proponents. When it comes to me, I believe that young people have such mentioned influence more than every other one. I have a myriad of reasons to support my idea two of which will be illuminated in the following paragraphs.
The most important reason to bear in mind is that these days in most countries of the world the democracy give the people the right to vote and choose their preferred politicians. Initially, in the past when kings where in the climax of the hierarchy of power, people had no way to interfere in politics and so in their future. But, these days when people can choose senators, presidents and other politicians according to investigations which they do before the elections, they interfere their futures directly. The candidates can introduce themselves using different medias so people can choose those ones whose school of though is like themselves'. For instance, ten years ago people were not satisfied with the president and his party and their thoughts in my country so they did not vote to them in the consequent election and the new president could rectify the country's situation successfully.
The other noteworthy point is that thanks to new technologies people read more about everything and they are more aware of all surrounding situation and their rights about them. First, when the average level of information increases in a society, those people will not accept whatever is dictated to them and they try to change unfavorable materials. Furthermore, the educated people are better able to learn their children to live in a higher quality situations and to think in a more productive and efficient way. For instance we have seen many societies -during the contemporary century- in which the new generation who had been brought up by an educated generation changed their lives even some of them came up in big revolutions such as in India.
To wrap everything in a conclusion, in my opinion, regardless to all collusions between major powers of the world, the young people can change their way of thinking and living. I am so optimistic about the world's future as a whole and I hope we will see a worldwide peace soon of course with the help of young people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, so, even so, for instance, of course, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2103.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9020979021 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74188899087 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531468531469 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 666.9 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.9020811135 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.4375 100.406767564 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8125 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5625 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220870202513 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0772845921459 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105419290034 0.0737576698707 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144363254117 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0990419381726 0.0645574589148 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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