Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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It is an inevitable fact that since human dawn, in every society youngsters are building blocks of society and affect every aspect of society in direct and indirect ways. In this regard, some people approve of the idea that young people do not have a significant influence on the essential decision-making process in society that could have a result in the determination of society's future. On the contrary, Others hold the opposite point of view. Personally, I concur with the former group. I substantiate my standpoint as follows.
To commence with, the galloping development of technology including social media and the internet culminate in increased young people awareness of trends in society. To delineate, the advancement of technology provides infrastructures for human beings to establish a connection with each other and convey information in the blink of eyes. In this vein, social trends that happen every day in society, distribute rapidly among people including youngsters and induce them to have reactions to this news which some of them have a tremendous impact on society. By the way of illustration, recently, in IRAN a Twitter trend has formed in order to prevent the execution of three innocent people against international law. One night, this social movement conducted by young people give rise to halt the execution, and the international peace foundation releases an issue against this action of the government and condemn it leading to legislation law in my country in order to prevent the execution punishment. Therefore, access to technology provides the opportunity for young people to have remarkable participation in important decision making in society.
The second worth-mentioning reason that comes into my mind is that youth nowadays are well educated, open-minded and energized which are the fundamental elements in order to impact on future of society. To put in a more vivid picture, prestigious universities with high-quality educations mushroomed in every society culminate in the emergent of the well-rounded and competent young generation that have broad horizons and knowledge in what happened in society. In addition. people at a younger age have more energy and ambition to amend the problems which they encounter in their lives. To exemplify, enacting a rule in favor of the marriage of homosexual people is the result of assiduous efforts of youngsters who have knowledge about the adverse effect of this prohibition on society which was hitherto and their open-mind attitude which recognizes this tendency normal for human beings. Accordingly, meeting all of this expertise, abilities, and rigor in young people turn them into valuable assets in the society which could have an undeniable and remarkable influence in forming the future.
To draw a conclusion. I firmly advocate the notion that the impact of young people in the determination of society's future is indisputable. This is because not only do they have access to new technology allowing them to make communicate with other people and share information in order to form social movement, but they also are more ambitious and have an expanded mindset that is essential elements for amending traditional society into a better one.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
...owledge in what happened in society. In addition. people at a younger age have more ener...
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Suggestion: People
... what happened in society. In addition. people at a younger age have more energy and a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, if, second, so, therefore, well, as for, in addition, by the way, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 94.0 52.1666666667 180% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 8.0752688172 310% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2734.0 1977.66487455 138% => OK
No of words: 513.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32943469786 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75914943092 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0194145241 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491228070175 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 887.4 618.680645161 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 90.6133958088 48.9658058833 185% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.894736842 100.406767564 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.52631578947 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218425472715 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0685013807933 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0659748213508 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153802194491 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0352191528338 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 11.7677419355 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 58.1214874552 61% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 143.0 86.8835125448 165% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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