Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Government decisions have the most effect on the young people's life because a legislation can simply influence their future. So, personally I believe that the young people should be aware to comment in the important decisions that may change the future of society and in my opinion, many contemporary young people think as me and they are effective on the government. I will explain my opinion in the following essay.

First off, I should say about social activity that is increase in advanced society. By the invention of the intelligent mobile and promotion of the social programs such as Instagram or Facebook, people are more aware about other's status. For instance, I can aware about my cousin who living in another countery via social programs. Even, I know that what she eated for her breakfast. Thus, I know about country's policy where she living there. So, I can comprasion between my country's policy and others and then, I can share my comment between the society. Consequently, I can influence on my country's government which is not possible for young people 50 years ago.

As second, I believe that contemporary people have more insight and wisdom than past. More accessible books and news can be one factor that contributes to people's knowledge. In conjunction with, modern life-style have more free times for people to think about their life and community traits can influence their life. By increasing in the young people's knowledge, they can more effective on the society. They can't be stoic when they see a desicion can adverse influence on whole their life. For example, 2 years ago the government of Iran decide to increase the duration of complusory military but the young people in Iran went to the street and said their objection to this legislation. So on the duration of complusory military had no change.

Consequently, by the increasing in young people's awareness about surronding community and the increasing in young people's insight individualy, they are more effective in the important decisions that be enacted by governments than past.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 56, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...sions have the most effect on the young peoples life because a legislation can simply i...
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Line 5, column 156, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'people'.
Suggestion: people
...s can be one factor that contributes to peoples knowledge. In conjunction with, modern ...
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Line 5, column 346, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
... their life. By increasing in the young peoples knowledge, they can more effective on t...
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Line 5, column 410, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...can more effective on the society. They cant be stoic when they see a desicion can a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, may, second, so, then, thus, for example, for instance, such as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1734.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 342.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0701754386 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7548887685 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473684210526 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 547.2 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.5132834898 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.3333333333 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160058554722 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0547486722567 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0507774749886 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120839627783 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0624979019667 0.0645574589148 97% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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