In life making decision plays a vital role and a good decision will shower a person with a good fortune and it will flourish the life. Although, some may oppose the idea of decision made by young people have influence the future of society as a whole. I personally, support the idea and this essay will explain why.
Frist, in this contemporary world youth are becoming self-centered. It is mainly because of limitation of opportunity available in the country and most of the young people chose to go abroad. Which means if the youth really care or make decision which has a positive impact toward'ss society but they have become self oriented and look for their own benefits. For instance, i usually try to find opportunities beyond my country that is to go out of country to be self sufficient person. In other words, i just look forward to my own good which will not help the society. Therefore, if the young people really care about the society, they will ensure to stay and try to find chances within our country ansd serve them.
Second, another reason is that youth are driven by western culture and tradition. Unlike in the past, most of the young people are fostered by other countries culture and tradition instead of preserving their own. If the young people really value their culture they will make effective decision which has greater impact. For example, in my country, virtually all the young are adapted to other countries attire and moreover, their living standard has also changed dramatically. Because of those adaptation, their decision has no influence on societies future as a whole and also there is high chances that the parents country will lose their identity in the future. As a result, it will lead to flock of young people to other country to have better life which is not good for the country as a whole.
In conclusion, i agree with the idea that at present young people decision has not stimulate to the importance of society futures as a whole because they are driven by the western culture and tradition. And in addition, youth has become more self-centered than in the past.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, may, moreover, really, second, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1752.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 367.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77384196185 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51014764449 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.465940054496 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 553.5 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.2009657478 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.058823529 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5882352941 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.76470588235 5.45110844103 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202982285459 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0732408074958 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0783959694252 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150997753446 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0553990174971 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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