Zoos are places were wild animals are kept for the purpose of preservation and tourism. Thus, the question of if zoos have any useful purpose is highly controversial. Zoos of nowadays now serve the purpose of tourism and revenue generation, rather than preservation. While some group of people may want to say that zoos are indispensable and must be kept, another exponentially increasing segment of people, in contrast, are of the opinion that zoos are not necessarily useful and so,should be wiped off. For me, I concur with the opinion that zoos should be eradicated and the rationale behind my viewpoint will be elaborated in the trailing paragraphs.
To begin with, what is the purpose of today's zoos? Surely, they are for profit making. In contemporary times, we realize that zoos do not serve the original purpose of preserving endangered species, rather, they are now an avenue for zoo keepers to make money. For instance, when I visited the zoo last month, I realized that although in the zoo, these animals are not properly fed. Let's take a tiger I saw for example, that tiger was so thin that the outline of its' skeletal system was unveiled. I mean, these animals are purely to entertain and pump in money from tourists because everybody wants to see some wild animals.
Second point is, are these zoos really safe for onlookers? I will answer that question with an illustration. It is kind of expected of hungry wild animals to pounce on anything that assumes the form of food. Like I was saying, during my visit to the zoo, a hungry leopard gripped powerfully, the hands of a little boy who was trying to feed it with some candies. It tore the hands to pieces and left the boy maimed for life, but this would have been avoided if there were no zoos in the first place. Moreover, zoos bring onlookers to a very close contact with wild animals, and we tend to forget that they are still wild animals, their true nature cannot be changed regardless of the number of injections they are forced to receive.
Finally, I wail to establish the most important fact that these animals are being unfairly imprisoned. Apart from the fact that these animals were unwillingly captured, they are made to endure the pain of being kept in unnatural conditions, being starved inexplicably, and forced to pose for the camera. To a very large extent, these animals are being exploited for an indefinite span of time. Only if they were humans, then they would have been able to receive justification from human right activists. But no, because it is not in their power to decide how they want to eat, where they choose to live, who they prefer to mate with, they are continually being made to dwell in unnatural homes. Tell me, why should they be whipped mercilessly for trying to break out in order to run away to a more habitable environment?
In a nutshell, the idea of a zoo is not practical because it is solely for profit making, spectators are unsafe, and lastly, because animals are not in their natural environment. Thus, zoos should be eradicated without further ado.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 47.0 15.1003584229 311% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2540.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 536.0 407.700716846 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73880597015 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81161862636 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57137746495 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 274.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511194029851 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 818.1 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.4454831343 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.6 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.44 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.32 5.45110844103 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.109036131165 0.236089414692 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.038415286026 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0347468952829 0.0737576698707 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0707289311447 0.150856017488 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0343345004328 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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