Currently the way how we make decisions while purchasing goods is hardly dependent on which information we take into account. A great deal of people hold the belief that advertisements negatively effect the ability of individuals to purchase products wisely. I partially agree that ads could influence us in a bad way, however I believe that if the governments controlled toughly advertisement campaigns we would receive only usefull information from advertisements.
First of all, the main motivation for sellers of goods is making profit, therefore they are interested in higher revenue instead of real value for clients. Over the last century advertisements has changed dramatically, they became much more concise and usually provide no iformation about real features of the product advertised. For example, recently BMW company has promoted its' new car with almost empty banners around the world, the only things which were printed on them were the wheel with BMW logo and slogan that everyone has to buy it. I belive that such a promotion provide no value for prospective buyers and should be banned.
Nevertheless, advertisements could help buyers to find out information about product they consider to buy, especialy if promotion companies were well supervised. The main problem is connected with the fact that some companies are cheating on customers by providing untruth information or emphasising only on positive features of the good. For instance, farmaceutical companies show in advertisements information about positive effects of treatments and do not disclose possible side effects and those type of advertisements is banned in developed countries.
In conclusion, even though we are negatively influenced by some advertisements, proper governments' controll could change the way how products are advertised. Moreover we could became wise consumers and consume products with maximal effectiveness.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 306, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a bad way" with adverb for "bad"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ially agree that ads could influence us in a bad way, however I believe that if the governme...
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Line 3, column 91, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[3]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'consider buying'.
Suggestion: consider buying
...find out information about product they consider to buy, especialy if promotion companies were ...
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Line 4, column 158, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...ge the way how products are advertised. Moreover we could became wise consumers and cons...
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Line 4, column 176, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'become'
Suggestion: become
...ducts are advertised. Moreover we could became wise consumers and consume products wit...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, therefore, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1625.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 291.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.58419243986 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17181199807 2.67179642975 119% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.621993127148 0.524837075471 119% => OK
syllable_count: 512.1 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.5588605341 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.416666667 100.406767564 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.25 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0833333333 5.45110844103 203% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125712719719 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0468308501484 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0391893583148 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.079278443837 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0389102209122 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 58.1214874552 52% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.38 10.9000537634 141% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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