Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Advertising influences people s behavior in a negative way use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion

Essay topics:

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Advertising influences people's behavior in a negative way.
use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion

Advertisements and commercials are, nowadays, an integral part of our daily life. However, some concerns have been raised about its potentially negative effect on the society. I believe that this is a true concern and advertising influences people's behavior in a negative way.

First of all, the main purpose of advertising items is to convince target population that they need the subject product of the advertisements. Thus, they encourage a false need among the people to buy things they may not necessarily need them. For example, my sister has become obsessed with her appearance because of the TV commercials and she spends a considerable percent of her salary to buy some lifting creams. However, she is so young that a lifting cream has nothing to add to her firm smooth skin.

Secondly, advertisings encourage people to consume further. Therefore, people may throw away used things that can be fixed in order to buy brand new products. This behavior will lead to development of a consumer society, which annually generate a huge amount of junk material. While our planet is suffering the insufficiency of resources, consumer societies will add to the burden.

Finally, the advertisements always use models with luxury clothing and excessively pruned body shapes to attract their targets. Unfortunately, young people will be mis-conducted by such models to believe they also should look the same way to be attractive. My young sister has also the same false idea that in order to look smart and beautiful she is required to have the same appearance of models in the advertisements.

In a nut shell, advertisements make their best attempt to generate a strong believe in the minds of people that in order to be perfect they urgently need to get rid of what they have and buy what they are advertising. Consequently, people try to shape their behavior accordingly. Therefore, the society will turn to be a consumer one. So, I believe that commercials have negative impacts on the society.

Votes
Average: 7.5 (2 votes)
Essay Categories

Comments

some concerns have been raised about its potentially negative effect on the society
Description: 'its' refers to what? Be sensitive to use pronouns.

This behavior will lead to development of a consumer society, which annually generate a huge amount of junk material.
This behavior will lead to the development of a consumer society, which annually generates a huge amount of junk material.

Sentence: In a nut shell, advertisements make their best attempt to generate a strong believe in the minds of people that in order to be perfect they urgently need to get rid of what they have and buy what they are advertising.
Description: An adjective is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to strong and believe

flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Different Words: 174 200

Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 330 350
No. of Characters: 1627 1500
No. of Different Words: 174 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.262 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.93 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.883 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 117 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 87 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.226 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.778 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.299 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.548 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.114 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5