Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
At universities and colleges, sports and social skills are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
Since the beginning of this century, in all distinctive civilized societies, it has been a very controversial argument among individuals or even intellectuals. Through which numerous controversies has engendered. Some people are inclined toward the opinion that universities should focus their resources on their classes and libraries only. However, others consider this issue in a whole diverse perspective. Although an absolute conclusion cannot be made in spite of all opposite attitudes, I strongly concur with the idea that universities should also finance at sports and social skills. The outstanding reasons for my opinion would be explored below.
First, individuals need social skills as well as knowledge in order to get a job. It is obvious that knowledge is a fundamental factor for employers. However, today one has to be able to combine different expertise to get a job. By combining both knowledge and social skills one can be very beneficial for companies. For example, if a student had a graduate degree at management, and he or she had gotten great grades, but he or she couldn’t communicate or gave a lecture in front of the audience, he or she would never be going to be a good manager. In fact, he or she may not be employed at all.
In addition to getting a better job, living in the society needs advanced social skills. After graduation, students should be able to cope with real life struggles. Difficulties such as cooperating with other individuals in a team or managing their social life would be waiting for them. Therefore, they have to learn diverse skills to survive in the society. From my personal experience, I can say my brother is an intelligent man who has graduated in Computer Engineering with great grades. However, ever since he got married, he found out that he lacked some social skills as simple as being a good listener. Indeed, he and her wife had a lot of fights, so he decided to get help from a counselor.
Apart from the points I made above, there is also another reason that I would like to discuss about. That students should exercise in order to have a healthy life. Being healthy is very important for all of us especially for students who undergo a lot of stress during exam weeks. Therefore, exercise can be an appropriate way to relax. I can remember my days of college. With playing basketball not only could I relax my mind but also I would be able to concentrate on my studying better.
By way of conclusion, based on the arguments that has explored above, I strongly agree with the statement that students should participate in sports and social activities, therefore universities had better finance on them. Because students need to have social skills in order to get hired. Furthermore, they have to cope with their real life, and finally they have to live a healthy life.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'therefore', 'well', 'apart from', 'as to', 'for example', 'in addition', 'in fact', 'such as', 'as well as', 'in spite of']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.202226345083 0.229887763892 88% => OK
Verbs: 0.161410018553 0.158761421928 102% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0853432282004 0.0866891130778 98% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0593692022263 0.046263068375 128% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0742115027829 0.0685040099705 108% => OK
Prepositions: 0.133580705009 0.118717715034 113% => OK
Participles: 0.038961038961 0.0351676179071 111% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.84705271091 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0333951762523 0.0309702414327 108% => OK
Particles: 0.00185528756957 0.00188951952338 98% => OK
Determiners: 0.0742115027829 0.0887237588012 84% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0315398886827 0.0209618222197 150% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00742115027829 0.0139019557991 53% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2848.0 2387.08602151 119% => OK
No of words: 484.0 408.028673835 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.88429752066 5.86048508987 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.48200974243 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.359504132231 0.338922669872 106% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.26652892562 0.251872472559 106% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.194214876033 0.174417080927 111% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.119834710744 0.112833075102 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84705271091 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502066115702 0.524397521467 96% => OK
Word variations: 58.5037729537 59.2087087015 99% => OK
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6684587814 135% => OK
Sentence length: 17.2857142857 20.5533526081 84% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8328443128 48.84282405 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.714285714 120.699889404 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2857142857 20.5533526081 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.678571428571 0.644075263715 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 43.9386068477 45.7405998639 96% => OK
Elegance: 1.27044025157 1.45489161554 87% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216690233794 0.300154397459 72% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0793980144246 0.103427244359 77% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0871237967018 0.0752933317313 116% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.397893619265 0.497263757937 80% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.105362356632 0.151897553556 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0622381990029 0.114077575197 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0643831608721 0.0781384742642 82% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.291730356403 0.336927656856 87% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.072130040746 0.067059652881 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144653800369 0.210909579961 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.063198418001 0.0618886996521 102% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8870967742 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.91756272401 203% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 13.0 8.42114695341 154% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.75985663082 217% => OK
Total topic words: 23.0 13.6433691756 169% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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