There is no shortage of debate about whether sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries or not. Certainly some people believe that the most important parts of university life are classes and libraries, while others feel that sport and social activites are complementary to those things and not less important than these things. I adopt a firm position that sports and other social activities are indispensable part of our lives and hence they are at least as important as academic activities. I feel this way for several reasons:
First of all, it is important to consider that sports and other social activities enrich our soul. Following an academic career feeds our brain but our soul also needs to give a break sometimes. Life is not just about following an academic career. We need to spend some time for other activities just to take a breath among the all busy tasks that we are studying on. If we do this, when we come back to our academic work, we feel more motivated and this motivation may be a key for a successful career. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. When I was in high school I was always interested in only my classes. After some point, I felt that it is not satisfying spending your whole day just for studying and I was feeling bored. As a result I abandoned to study. However, at university I decided to go to basketball class and I started to go to gym regularly. Now I feel better and more motivated towards a life and also towards my classes.
Not only is sport enriching our soul and motivating us but also it gives student the opportunity to become socialized person. Creating a social environment in the university life is important for all students because thanks to our social environment when we want to kill time it is easy to find some one to hangout. Likewise, when we need some help be it for our studies or for our personal problems, we can find someone to handle with these issues. Sports and other social experiences are excellent medium to create your own social environment. For instance, as I said above I am going to gym regularly and whenever I go to play basketball, I always find someones to play together and after play we are talking about us and in some cases we become good friends. One of my best friend is from this sport activity and whenever I face a problem she always with me to solve this problem.
By way of conclusion, based on the arguments explored above, I am of the opinion that sports and other social activities are at least as important as the academic ones. Actually, even though some people still advocate that academic activities are the most important things for university life, the vast majority of individuals comprehends the significance of sport and other social activities on our life quality. If we just focus on our studies then we feel more stressed and bored and at some point we may give up.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'feed'?
Suggestion: feed
... our soul. Following an academic career feeds our brain but our soul also needs to gi...
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Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...rience is a compelling example of this. When I was in high school I was always inter...
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Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...asses. After some point, I felt that it is not satisfying spending your whole day just for studyi...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ses. After some point, I felt that it is not satisfying spending your whole day j...
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Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...t for studying and I was feeling bored. As a result I abandoned to study. However,...
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Message: Did you mean 'someone'?
Suggestion: someone
...we want to kill time it is easy to find some one to hangout. Likewise, when we need some...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, hence, however, if, likewise, may, so, still, then, while, at least, for instance, i feel, talking about, as a result, first of all, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2420.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 520.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65384615385 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77530192783 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64861175539 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453846153846 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 792.0 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.6010102595 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.217391304 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6086956522 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5652173913 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205214428367 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0723002237614 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0654767269248 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160172320456 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0604505327116 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.99 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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